Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this modern era, people are more exicted to become a part of different cultures and visit different countries to explore more about the world, their culture, their differences and their countries nature. Electronic media has given a major part in this also for the people who can not travel easily because of their routines and work.
In the recent surveys, new generation was found more interested in travelling. Now a days, exploring new cultures, knowing different religious belifes and to talk with multiligual people has been made far easy then before. For example, people are now using air planes to travel all around the globe where ever they want to go they can. According to many law makers, recently in china new law introduced in the favour of employees, stating that employees now will be given one month annual leave just for travelling. It also mentions that employers should be componsated with their no salary deduction in this period. This helps employees remain motivated and dedicated to their work. Despite travelling, people also enjoy watching nature and diffferent cultures on their handsets, televisions and other electronic media platforms. Social media platforms made much easier for people who can travel travel, it helps the people to have contact with people of other countries and know the differences between them, enjoy talking to them and much more.
According to me, this trend is a great therapy for the people having mental issues and also other medical conditions. It helps to prevent anxiety and help people relief presure and tesions in difficult times.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the ease of international travel and media consumption, attempting to weigh advantages and disadvantages. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat confused. The student touches upon personal enrichment and stress relief ('great therapy for the people having mental issues'), but the discussion on advantages and disadvantages lacks balance. For instance, the example about a new law in China regarding employee travel is underdeveloped and only tangentially relevant to the core question of whether the overall advantages outweigh disadvantages. The position is discernible at the end, but the overall task coverage aligns with Band 5 descriptors, as main ideas are under-developed and lack sufficient supporting evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays some basic organization with an introduction, body paragraph, and conclusion, but overall progression is lacking. Paragraphing is used, yet the ideas within the second paragraph jump abruptly between different topics, such as travel, Chinese labor laws, and social media, without clear transitions. Cohesive devices are minimal or inaccurate (e.g., 'Despite travelling, people also enjoy watching nature...'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical flow hinders readability, placing the text firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and contains numerous errors in spelling and word choice. Examples include 'exicted' instead of excited, 'religious belifes', 'multiligual', 'air planes', 'componsated', and 'no salary deduction'. While the student attempts less common vocabulary like 'multilingual' and 'therapy', the frequent inaccuracies in collocation and spelling cause difficulty for the reader and strain comprehension at times, which matches the Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex forms that result in faulty construction, such as 'Electronic media has given a major part in this also for the people who can not travel easily...' and 'Social media platforms made much easier for people who can travel travel...'. Frequent errors in tense consistency, prepositions, and sentence fragments hinder fluency and affect readability, corresponding to a Band 5 score.
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