Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this current era of scientifical and technological progress, we find ourselves in the modern world, where the ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world made it more possible then ever for people to know how other people lives in other countries.
It is crucial, because different people have different level of understandings, mindsets and perceptions regarding the given statement. I will discuss various viewpoints in the upcomming paragraphs which will lead us to a final conclusion, either its benefits are higher then its disadvantages or not.
In the modern world, there are two type of groups, Group-A, and Group-B, both groups have valid points to support their opnions. According to group A: everybody have cell phones with internet and social media apps in them, and they are connected to the world by using different applications in which they got update about the whole world, Applications like twitter are the major source of spreading information to the people of different countries, Its benefical that we are updated on whats going on currently in world, on the other hand Group B, says that social media or mass media is not good for us because its a waste of time, they think they people who use social media waste their time on watching useless news and watching reels and documentory videos.
In conclusion, I support the opnion of Group A, because its benefical for us to gain knowledge about different kind of news all over the world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of international travel and mass media. However, the development of ideas is superficial and poorly structured. The writer introduces a cumbersome framing device of dividing opinions into 'Group A' and 'Group B' rather than directly discussing the core societal impacts. While a position is stated in the conclusion supporting the benefits, the arguments provided within the body paragraphs are repetitive and underdeveloped. The text touches upon the prompt's requirements, but the lack of substantial examples and clear, sustained argumentation places it within the Band 5 descriptors, as the task is only partially addressed with limited ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks clear logical organization and progression. The division into paragraphs is arbitrary, with the second body paragraph running on into a single, massive block of text containing multiple shifting viewpoints ('Group A' and 'Group B') without adequate transition markers. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and repetitively, such as the frequent reliance on comma splices and basic conjunctions like 'and' or 'on the other hand'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in sentences like 'both groups have valid points to support their opnions.' Paragraphing is poorly handled, failing to separate distinct ideas effectively. This corresponds to the Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word-choice errors and spelling mistakes throughout the text. Examples include 'scientifical' instead of scientific, 'upcomming' instead of upcoming, 'benefical' instead of beneficial, and 'opnions' instead of opinions. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts are marred by inaccurate spelling and inappropriate collocations. While basic communication is established, the frequency of lexical errors and limited vocabulary breadth align closely with the Band 4 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a high frequency of errors that frequently impede readability. The response contains numerous run-on sentences and comma splices, such as 'In this current era... lives in other countries.' There are also persistent errors in subject-verb agreement, such as 'everybody have' and 'people who use social media waste their time'. Complex sentence structures are attempted, but they are generally faulty or lack punctuation control. The range of structures is limited, and the density of basic grammatical errors places this response firmly at Band 4.
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