Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Easy International travel and the increase in various kinds of mass media has created feasibility in knowing how other individuals spend their lives in other places of the World.Social media platforms and travel agencies have played a great role in this revolution.
In today's era it is so easy to find out the culture and living style of a particular country. Everything could be easily known through differnt vlogs and blogs. For instance there is this traveler known as Luke Deckermen he posts abouts all the countries he visits and built a community for travelers to help eachother explore the world and travel easily. He shares his experiences of meeting people from different cultures and ethicities. Now-a-days almost everyone has an idea of famous countries and how people live there.
Travel agencies have expanded drastically, they advertise the travel packages moreover make economical packages for cheaper flights and accomodations in order to make to travel easily which makes it so easier to know how other people live in various countries. Furthermore it encourages more individuals to travel and discover other cultures. Recently Finland decided to give stipend to travelers willing to explore and travel the country which is a great way of motivating tourists to roam around the country.
There is no harm in knowing other people's way of living in different areas of the world, it rather is a trasure of knowledge and wisdom. Diversity is appreciatable, the advantages of the mass media and easy international travel is indeed far more tahjn any disadvantages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task, discussing both the impact of mass media and international travel while taking a clear position that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The ideas are generally relevant, mentioning cultural awareness, travel blogging, and cheaper travel packages. However, the development of ideas tends to be a bit descriptive rather than analytical. For instance, the example about Luke Deckermen or Finland offering stipends are stated but not fully linked back to a deep exploration of the core question regarding societal advantages and disadvantages. This places the response comfortably at Band 6.0, as it addresses the prompt adequately but lacks the deeper extension and robust support required for higher band levels.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a logical progression from an introduction to body paragraphs discussing media and travel agencies, concluding with a clear stance. Paragraphing is utilized, though some paragraphs could be better structured for logical flow. Cohesive devices are present, but there are instances of faulty or mechanical referencing, such as starting sentences abruptly without smooth transitional phrases. For example, sentences like 'Everything could be easily known through differnt vlogs and blogs' and 'Travel agencies have expanded drastically, they advertise the travel packages moreover make economical packages...' demonstrate comma splices and slightly disjointed logical links. Therefore, the performance aligns with Band 6.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common lexical items such as 'feasibility', 'ethicities' (a typo for ethnicities), and 'trasure' (a typo for treasure). However, there are several spelling errors and word-choice inaccuracies throughout the text, including 'differnt', 'abouts', 'accomodations', 'tahjn', and 'appreciatable'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to Band 6.0 because the control over less common vocabulary lacks precision and consistency.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some variety in structure. However, there are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues, such as run-on sentences, comma splices ('Travel agencies have expanded drastically, they advertise the travel packages moreover make economical packages'), and missing articles or prepositions. While the meaning remains generally clear and communication is rarely impeded, the frequency of these grammatical and punctuation slips prevents the essay from reaching Band 7.0, where frequent error-free sentences and tight control of punctuation are expected.
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