Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Over the past few decades, growth of international travel and reach of different kinds of
media all over the world have made it more convinent than ever for people to know about others lifestyle.In my opinion it has provide a platform many people to expose themselve among other people and share their own expriences among among.Where as this change has some demerits but positive aspect outweigh its disadvantages as discussed in the eassy.
To initiate with , Due to easy access to the personal lifestyle of many people made them vulnerable to the physical and mental threat.for instance, a person uploading his/her daily routine in social media can get negative feedback , a person who is famous in social media are easy prey fo the sociopath.This is because they are easily updating their routine to the other people without knowing about bad things that can occour due to their availability.This can cause a persons life in danger while some get killed ,some get harresed.Access to personal life can cause serious problems to a person wherever
they live in the world.
On the other hand , People can create their finance and spread their products all over the world by travelling and can crack international exposure.This is because travelling people can get a lot of opportunity to communicates with multinational people.This helps them to develop their personal protfolio. for example, vloggers earning money through internet by travelling various places and being familiar to other people living in different countries.Despite being negative aspects of the ease of this international
travel and digital spreading ensuring good relationship with other people made it secure and more convinent.
To sum up , while having some demerits of nternational travel there are many positive sites that cancel out its disadvantages.Ensuring good behaviour and good practise towards other people made everything convenentional.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of international travel and mass media, eventually taking a clear position that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Ideas are introduced, such as personal exposure and networking versus security threats and vulnerability, but their development is somewhat limited and repetitive. For example, the body paragraphs lean on generalisations without deep elaboration or robust supporting evidence. Consequently, the response fits best at Band 5.5, as the task is addressed and a position is presented, but the depth of idea extension falls slightly short of the requirements for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays a basic logical organisation with clear attempts at paragraphing and introductory and concluding remarks, as seen in 'To initiate with' and 'To sum up'. However, cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical. There are noticeable errors in referencing and sentence connectivity, such as 'among among' and run-on sentences like 'In my opinion it has provide a platform many people to expose themselve among other people and share their own expriences among among.' Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs often breaks down, leading to a choppy reading experience. These features place the response firmly at a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting words like 'vulnerable', 'sociopath', and 'protfolio'. However, there are numerous spelling errors ('convinent', 'eassy', 'occour', 'harresed', 'protfolio', 'convenentional', 'nternational') and awkward word choices ('spread their products', 'digital spreading'). These noticeable errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and restrict the lexical score. While the writer attempts some less common items, the high frequency of lexical and orthographic inaccuracies keeps the score at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tense, agreement, and prepositions, such as 'has provide a platform many people', 'a person who is famous in social media are easy prey', and 'travelling people can get a lot of opportunity'. Punctuation errors are also prevalent, including missing spaces after commas and periods. While simple structures are sometimes accurate, attempts at complex structures frequently result in faulty syntax that causes strain for the reader, aligning the grammar score with Band 5.0.
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