Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Is is well know that the ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever fro people to know how other people live in other countries. And i think this development have more advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Traveling different places in reality world can benefit people's view, especially for campus students. In that time, they begin to choose career and plan for future. Through media spreading forgein culture and various habitat, which will broden their horizon. Also they might join the oversea tourism group and travel aborad. On the one hand, this will improve their individual ability; On the other hand, they will get unforgetable memory during traveling time.

Presently, most people dislike their own country culture, which begin over commercialize for tourism. Website communications and videos can let them easily know other countries without go out. Also they can learn in everywhere or everytime. Otherwise, some people who prefer aborading can easily make travel plan. Online media usually not contain fake information than former times, and it will be response more quicker.So it is quite simple to ask local people about the realism fact, maybe some might wrong and also conclude with useless informations. Moreover, is more convenience for tourism catch city's hot spot and learn basic local lifestyle.

In conclusion, international world actually benefit peoples life and broarden their sights. It provide more chance to know different knowledges and made more possiblity for people travel all around the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a position that the development has more advantages, and you give relevant points about students gaining wider perspectives, learning through media, and planning travel. However, the discussion is only partial: the disadvantages are not clearly identified or weighed against the benefits, and several claims—such as people disliking their own culture—are not explained or supported. The conclusion repeats the general benefit but does not resolve the comparison. The response contains 221 words, so it is 29 words below the required minimum; 35 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, explain one or two specific disadvantages, compare their impact with the benefits, and develop each point with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic essay shape, with an opening position, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can identify the broad topic of each section. However, progression within the body paragraphs is difficult to follow because several different points are joined without clear links. For example, the paragraph beginning “Presently” moves from attitudes to national culture to websites, misinformation and tourism hotspots. Connectives such as “On the one hand,” “Otherwise,” and “Moreover” do not always show the relationship between the ideas accurately. Some references, including “this” and “it,” are also unclear. Organise each paragraph around one main idea, then use linking phrases to show cause, contrast or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “international travel,” “mass media,” “individual ability,” and “local lifestyle.” This gives the response enough topic-related language to communicate its general message. However, the range is limited and errors in spelling, word form and collocation are frequent enough to make some phrases difficult to understand, such as “forgein culture,” “broaden their horizon,” “unforgetable memory,” and “useless informations.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “reality world” and “the realism fact.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than trying to use many ambitious phrases. Check spelling and whether nouns are countable, and choose precise terms such as “perspective,” “authentic information,” and “travel experiences.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use some simple sentences and attempt more complex forms, for example “Through media spreading foreign culture and various habitat, which will broaden their horizon.” However, this construction is incomplete, and many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, articles or sentence boundaries. Examples include “this development have,” “It provide,” and “made more possibility”; the opening also has a sentence fragment beginning “And I think.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, as in “On the one hand…; On the other hand,” and the run-on sequence “more quicker.So.” These frequent errors sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and tense before adding subordinate clauses.

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