Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The comfort of worldwide tour as well as the expand of different kinds of broadcasting allover the world have increased the knowledge about other country's residence more than ever for common people. The benefits of this improvement have made us overlook the disadvantages.

Mass media, media communication showed us the livlihood of other country's people. As we can see their food habit,cultures,rituals, traditions through the news channels and youtube. This has made us experienced about their life. Those videos and channels show us the reality about people who are hundrends of miles away from us.What helps us gather knowledges and so many things.

Now a days people can travel worlwide easily because of a good transportation system. Good communication and english language have helped us a lot when it comes to visit other countrys.Because of this spreading technologies we can visit easily and know about people allover the world. i have visited india recently. It wasn't a tough process to get the visa. I visited kalkata and liked their culture ,food , habits, language, hospitality a lot.

Apperantly, without the convinience of traveling i wouldn't have get this experiences.Lots of good sides of international travel and media have made out life easy to enjoy and know about the unknown a lot.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a position in the opening, saying the benefits have made people “overlook the disadvantages,” and you give relevant examples of learning about other cultures through media and your visit to India. However, the response addresses the question only partially: it describes benefits but does not explain what the disadvantages are or compare their importance with the advantages. The ideas are also brief and under-supported; for example, the India visit is a personal illustration, but you do not explain how it demonstrates that the advantages outweigh the drawbacks. The response is 39 words below the required minimum, which further limits the development of your argument. To improve, discuss at least one disadvantage and develop a clear comparison supported by specific reasoning or evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: the opening states your view, followed by a paragraph about mass media and one about travel, with a final sentence returning to the benefits. This gives the reader a general sense of the two main topics. However, progression is limited, and several ideas are joined in ways that make their relationships unclear. For instance, “What helps us gather knowledges and so many things” is a fragment, while “Because of this spreading technologies” does not clearly connect the preceding point to your example. The conclusion is also very brief and does not bring together a comparison of advantages and disadvantages. Use complete topic sentences, clearer links between claims and examples, and a separate paragraph to address drawbacks.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “mass media,” “transportation system,” “culture,” “hospitality,” and “visa.” These terms help communicate your main examples, and there is an attempt to discuss both travel and media. However, the range is limited and several word choices, forms, and spellings are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the reader pause. Examples include “comfort of worldwide tour,” “the expand of different kinds of broadcasting,” “livlihood,” and “gather knowledges.” Some expressions are also repeated, such as “allover the world” and “know.” Build a more precise set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe how media “provides insight into daily life” rather than saying it shows people’s “livlihood.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, and the main message is generally understandable. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to combine ideas often produce incomplete or faulty sentences. “What helps us gather knowledges and so many things” has no complete main clause, and “without the convinience of traveling i wouldn't have get this experiences” contains errors in the conditional verb form and sentence structure. There are also recurring problems with articles, plurals, agreement, and punctuation, as in “other country's people” and the missing capitalisation of “I.” These errors can make parts of the response difficult to follow. Practise complete complex sentences and review verb forms, articles, and sentence punctuation.

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