Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is more possible for people to know about the living standard of other countries by the easa of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world. There are some advantage and disadvantage regarding this statement.

On the one hand, many social media are operated in this modern days. In every part of the nation there are the media runed by the individuals. It helps to know about the traditionals and cultures of different places. Each countrys have there own way of celebration festivals. For example, our nation nepal have dashain and tihar festival which is one of the biggest cultures whereas, the dubai have their own traditions like eid. So, like these we can know about the other countrys occuagens by the assist of media platform.

On the other hand, many people copy other country culture and forgot their own cultures. In this modern days, each individuals easily be attracted and fast obtain other cultures. Another important factor is that the dressing sence, fooding habits, festivals each things are different for one another places. These all are shown in the internet and influence the peoples to obtain such activities. Therefore, slowly they forget their own way of their own traditional method of celebration in such things.

In conclusion the media have done good things in the field of knowing other cultures. Although media have washed peoples mind and sent them in the path of obtaining other nations things rather that their own.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic by presenting one benefit—learning about other cultures—and one drawback—the possibility of adopting them at the expense of local traditions. The Nepalese festivals example gives the benefit some relevant support. However, the question asks whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and your conclusion does not make this comparison clear: it says media have done good things, then focuses on their harmful influence. The ideas are also brief and general, with little explanation of how international travel contributes. The response is 234 words, 16 words below the 250-word minimum; this limits the space available to develop your position. State your view directly and extend each main point with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the two sides of your discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several ideas are listed rather than connected—for example, “the dressing sence, fooding habits, festivals each things” does not form a clear sequence. Some linking phrases are awkward or do not show the relationship precisely, such as “So, like these” and “Although” at the start of the final sentence. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example explicitly to its point, and make the conclusion follow logically from a stated overall position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “traditions,” “cultures,” “celebration festivals,” and “influence,” and the examples of Dashain, Tihar, and Eid make the subject clear. However, the range is basic and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as repeated uses of “own cultures” and “other countries.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, including “easa,” “runed,” “occuagens,” and “dressing sence,” which can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “cultural practices,” “local customs,” and “adopt foreign lifestyles” would help express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast between the two body paragraphs and an example introduced with “For example.” However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in sentence construction and agreement sometimes make meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “Each countrys have there own way” has problems with subject–verb agreement and sentence structure, while “our nation nepal have” also needs a singular verb and correct sentence punctuation. The final sentence beginning “Although” is incomplete as written because it lacks a main clause. Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation before submitting.

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