Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In modern society, human being could get many idea about the life style of another nations individuals all over the world. This are possible because of now international travelling are quite flexible and multimedia. Where some individuals find this are positive development and few others hold opposite view about this trend. However, here I outline both its pons and cons prior to giving reasoned conclusion.

On the one hand, there are plenty of advantages of this trend. To begin with, currently people are travelling more than before time for various reasons. Such as for profession, business, medical, research and many more reason people visit another country. When they visiting other country they get many knowledge the living style, and culture of than country. Sometime the people try to follow their culture and life style. For an example, many under developing try to follow better education system and medical methods from advanced countries. Apart from that, media are now publish and showing everything what happing in the world with the help of technology. Therefore, the whole world comes one single roof and within a minute people know what happen in the other nation. For an instance, most news channel like BBC world , CNN shows all major events in the world daily basis. By this people can easily get idea what are happening all over the earth.

On the other side, though this trend has so many positive side but it also has some downward side that effect in many ways. Firstly, sometimes visiting another country spread several type of diseases among the people. Because one region bacteria and virus are carrying by human being so when they travelling they carry out this dangerous thing and spread it to the whole world. In that case, recently the whole world face covid issue this virus spread because of people travelling other country. Another one, sometimes many country appoint or sent secret agent to another nation to get information about that nation. After that they use this data against to that country. Now the multimedia publish many news even the internal information which can bring any benefit to the country. Sometime this create negative impression of this country to internationally.

In conclusion, here I thoroughly discuss both advantage and disadvantage of this current trend in the world. Although it has many negative side but I believe that this trend positive sides are significantly important. Because by this way the whole can share their culture and technology and assist each other to build a better world for living.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both sides of the question and state a clear overall view: the benefits are “significantly important” despite the disadvantages. Your examples about learning from other countries’ education and medical systems, and about COVID-19 spreading through travel, are relevant and help explain your points. This meets the task well overall. However, the discussion does not consistently weigh the advantages against the disadvantages: the media-related benefit is mainly that people can learn about events, while the claimed harm of publishing internal information is not clearly explained. The point about secret agents also shifts away from how people learn about life in other countries. Develop these links and explain more directly why the benefits outweigh the risks to strengthen the argument further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other side,” and “In conclusion” makes the overall direction easy to follow. The examples generally appear beside the points they support. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear: “Where some individuals find this are positive development” does not form a clear transition, and “Another one” introduces a point without showing how it relates to the previous discussion. The conclusion repeats the broad position rather than drawing together the comparison. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and make references such as “this trend” or “this data” precise so readers can follow the argument without pausing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “international travelling,” “living style,” “diseases,” “secret agent,” and “negative impression,” and you attempt some less common expressions such as “advanced countries.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making meaning less clear. Examples include “many idea,” “another nations individuals,” “under developing,” and “downward side.” Repetition of “people,” “country,” and “world” also limits flexibility. Aim to learn common collocations and accurate word forms, such as “gain insight into another culture” and “developing countries.” More precise vocabulary would help distinguish the effects of travel from those of mass media and make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “because,” “when,” and “although,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and errors recur in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “This are possible” has incorrect agreement, while “when they visiting other country” is missing an auxiliary and an article. “Media are now publish” combines incompatible verb forms, and “the whole can share” omits a necessary noun. Some long sentences also join ideas awkwardly, as in the sentence about travel carrying viruses. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly attached supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb forms.

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