Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Today, because of international travels and mass media it is easy to know about the life style of other countries. Although it is a beneficial invention, it sometime spread false news which make our life fairful. So, in this eassy i describe the pros and cons of these travels and mass media.

To begin with advantages of international travels and mass media all over the world. Today, the world is a global village all the people layiing on internet know what is heppening in the world which make them more knowledge able and awer. In addition, Today, we are able to know about the culture and histories of all the countries and religions. For example, In the past when the wars began only those people know about that those looked it from there eyes but nowaday if any war starts first it will release on social media and then they starts fighting.

Now the disadvantages of social media and international travels. Sometime, someone spreads fase news which cuase fair and disputes in the society. Furthermore, when they spreed any false news it also effect our countries not only economically but also effect our beurocracy and damocracy. For example, when in 2020 the long march is started in pakistan in the result of false news it effect all the systems of pakistan.

In conclusion, Although it is a good invention,it need a take care department to check weather the news is true or false. So, that no one can spread false news. Government should develop a department to check the news.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both advantages and disadvantages and give a concluding recommendation for a government department to check news. However, the question asks whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and your position on this comparison is not clear: calling the development beneficial does not explain which side is stronger. The benefits—greater awareness of world events and knowledge of other cultures—are relevant, but they are stated broadly and the example about wars is difficult to follow. The disadvantages focus mainly on false news and its effects in Pakistan, with little explanation of how these effects compare with the benefits. State your judgement directly and develop each main point with a clear explanation and a relevant, specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on advantages, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “Now the disadvantages,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow this structure. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, particularly in the example about wars, where the relationship between reporting and people “starts fighting” is not explained. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “they” and “it” do not always make clear who or what is meant. Improve cohesion by connecting each example explicitly to its main point and using precise references, rather than relying mainly on paragraph-opening transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “global village,” “culture,” “false news,” and “economically,” and you attempt to discuss social and political consequences. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “fairful,” “fase,” “beurocracy,” and “damocracy.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “more knowledge able and awer” and “it will release on social media.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for the central ideas—such as international awareness, cultural understanding, misinformation, and public institutions—would help you express the argument clearly and avoid repeating general words such as “effect.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the concession in “Although it is a beneficial invention” and the conditional idea “if any war starts.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “which make them” should agree with its subject, while “it sometime spread” needs a correctly formed adverb and verb. The sentence beginning “Although it is a good invention” is also joined awkwardly to the following clause. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses; check subject–verb agreement and punctuation when editing.

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