Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This esay topic illustrate about international travelling and mass media power. some of population knowing very well through social media how people live and spend their lifes in other countries.

on the one hand, some of students go abroad for study and many of people gose for finding jobs in other European countries. every educated person see different advertisement accordingly study or job then they apply and traveled to abroad. here is an important information about Pakistani students above then 80% student ls go abroad for study in 2026. and more 40%phd students go European countries for finding job because Pakistan have no good jobes available. thats why many of people s leav over respective state.

on the other hand, alot of countries provide different opportunities for travelling and introducing reason able amount packages. and many of couples and families go for international travels. and some states give us different secholership for students and many of youngsters apply and get secholerships. it is best for future and make

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response is only minimally developed in relation to the question. It mentions studying and working abroad, travel packages, and scholarships, but does not clearly explain whether the advantages of learning about life in other countries outweigh the disadvantages. No disadvantages are discussed, and the examples—such as the claims about Pakistani students and PhD graduates—are not explained or connected to the central comparison. The final sentence is unfinished, which leaves the argument without a conclusion. The response also does not meet the required minimum length, so there is too little material to develop a clear position and support it. To improve, state your view directly, address both advantages and disadvantages, and explain how each example supports your judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise ideas using “on the one hand” and “on the other hand,” and the response broadly moves from education and employment to travel and scholarships. However, these linking phrases do not establish a clear comparison of advantages and disadvantages, and the ideas within each section are difficult to follow. For example, the statistics about students and PhD graduates are introduced without a clear link to the topic of knowing how people live elsewhere. Several sentences begin with “and,” while the final thought stops at “make,” leaving the ending incomplete. Use separate paragraphs for each main point, connect examples explicitly to the argument, and finish with a conclusion that restates your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “international travelling,” “mass media,” “advertisement,” “opportunities,” and “scholarships.” These choices show an attempt to discuss education, employment, and travel. However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems make parts of the message difficult to understand, such as “secholership,” “jobes,” and “reason able amount packages.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “international travels” and “leav over respective state.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “study abroad,” “employment opportunities,” and “cultural understanding” would help express the task’s central ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple sentences and longer structures, including “many of people gose for finding jobs in other European countries” and a sentence beginning “because Pakistan have no good jobes available.” However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent, and several sentences are difficult to interpret. Examples include “some of population knowing very well,” “every educated person see,” and “Pakistan have,” where the subject and verb forms do not agree or the sentence pattern is incomplete. Articles and plural forms are also often missing or inaccurate. The final sentence is unfinished, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles, and sentence endings.

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