Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays travel worldwide is more convenince. Moreover, distribute of multiple kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more easy than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries. This development has more merits than demerits.

Firstly, construction of airport in numerous countries made travel more accessible for us. Although this will help us to know more about other people who live in other countries by watching travel vlog in youtube, mini vlog in instagran and etc. Get to know about other countries helps us to improve way of living and know more about their culture. However, its also benifical to certain people who wants to go abroad for their studies or for work. Knowing about other countries helps them to understand cost of living, enviroment, climate and etc.

Several people love to travel all over the world and some of them earned money through sharing the visual of multiple countries by making travelling vlogs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear overall view—“This development has more merits than demerits”—and give relevant benefits, including learning about culture and helping people prepare for study or work abroad. However, the response addresses the question only partially: it explains advantages but gives no disadvantages or comparison showing why the benefits outweigh them. The final point about earning money from travel vlogs is introduced but not developed. The response contains 137 words, so it is 113 words below the required minimum; the 25 words copied from the prompt were not counted. This short length leaves the position and supporting ideas minimally developed. To improve, discuss at least one disadvantage and explain why your chosen side is stronger, using specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening states your position, “Firstly” introduces a main point, and a separate final paragraph adds another benefit. The ideas are generally related to international travel and learning about other countries. However, progression is limited, and the second paragraph combines several points without clearly showing how they connect. “Although” introduces a clause that does not form a complete contrast, while “However” does not clearly signal a contrasting idea. The final paragraph feels added rather than developed from the preceding discussion. Use one paragraph for each main argument, connect each example explicitly to the question, and include a clear comparison of advantages and disadvantages.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main topic, with relevant expressions such as “cost of living,” “climate,” “culture,” and “travel vlogs.” You also attempt topic-specific wording, including “mass media” and “accessible.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the reader pause: “distribute of multiple kinds” and “the visual of multiple countries” do not express your meaning naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “convenince,” “instagran,” “benifical,” and “enviroment.” Build accuracy by learning common collocations and checking spelling, while varying repeated phrases such as “other countries.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and a more complex structure, for example, “Although this will help us…” and “some of them earned money through…”. However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. The sentence beginning “Although” is incomplete because it is not joined to an independent clause. In “its also benifical to certain people who wants,” the possessive form and subject–verb agreement are incorrect; “people” also requires “want.” The opening sentence has an unclear grammatical construction, and “Get to know about other countries helps us” uses an unsuitable verb form as its subject. Practise complete complex sentences, agreement, articles, and consistent sentence patterns, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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