Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, many ease of international travel and spread a various kind of mass media all over the world made it possible for people to know how the other people live in other countries. I personally think that advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages,

Firstly, international travel is much more easy because many people watch other country weather or environment on social media. They watch what type of dresses they wear and what was the environment of the other country. For example if some one plan to visit US they comes from India the Indian weather is summer but in US their is winter. They watch media about the weather of the country this can benefit him for packing the clothes.

Secondly, many people love to wear other country outfit while he was living on another country so they watch it any streamer or any content creator of foreign country wear it so they can wear it. Many people like other culture he watch how the other country people live they saw their culture and many traditional events and they enjoy it while sitting on other country.

Social media provide many solution of a problem and if someone try to start any content creator page it will help him to watch a streamer of creator in which country they live.

In conclusion, international travel are so much easy right know if some people plan to go on a trip and they were in a trouble. What type of wheater on that country so they watch it on social media

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear overall view—“advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages”—and give relevant examples of how media can help travellers prepare for different weather and clothing. However, the response only partially develops the comparison asked for: it explains possible benefits but does not identify or weigh any disadvantages. Several points are also unclear or insufficiently supported, such as the discussion of wearing foreign outfits and the brief reference to starting a content-creator page. To strengthen the response, explain a small number of relevant advantages in more depth, include at least one disadvantage, and show explicitly why the benefits are greater. Keep the argument focused on how travel and mass media help people understand life in other countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening opinion, two body paragraphs introduced by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader recognise the intended sequence. However, progression is limited: the third body point about creating a content page appears abruptly and is not clearly connected to the main argument, while the conclusion repeats the weather example rather than summarising the overall comparison. Some references are difficult to follow, particularly “they watch it any streamer” and “they enjoy it while sitting on other country.” Organise each paragraph around one clear reason, connect examples directly to that reason, and use the conclusion to restate why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “international travel,” “mass media,” “social media,” “culture,” and “traditional events,” so the reader can identify the subject of the essay. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “other country” and “watch.” Some word choices and combinations are unclear or unnatural, such as “many ease of international travel,” “other country outfit,” and “provide many solution of a problem.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to understand. Build a wider set of precise expressions for cultural exchange, travel preparation, and media influence, and check that words combine naturally. For example, describe people as learning about “local customs” or checking “weather forecasts” before travelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and use basic linking structures such as “because,” “if,” and “while,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and errors are frequent enough to make some ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “many people watch … they comes,” “the Indian weather is summer,” and “international travel are so much easy,” where agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction are inaccurate. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “if some one plan to visit US they comes from India.” Practise building clear sentences with a subject and correctly formed verb, then add one dependent clause at a time. Check agreement, tense, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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