Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The easy excess to travelling abroad and mass spreadof the electronic devices throughtout the whole world have provided more excess for people across the different countries to know about eachohers lives. There are advantages and disadvantages of this new trends, we will discuss them both below.

The experiance that we get from the exposure to new counties and their culture shapes our views on our individual lifes it also open new windows of opportunities for us such as learning new languages, craftman ship, trying unique cusines. Having information on the counties also help us to advance more in various fields like politics, technologies, agriculture, education, businesses by exchangings information on these subjects, moreover it also boost the economy of the nation by import and export of goods to other nations.

There are noticable disadvantages to this development also such as hugh number of immagration can affect economy of both the counties, which is lossing the number and the nation which is gaining the number. Job markets can crash because of over population plus the tourist spots can get over crowded which in a major problem also managing the crowd can also be challenging it in self. Inaddition to these losing the culture and traditions can also be a huge problem that natives of that nation feels.

In my view there are positive and negative affect of everything, but this developments advantages are more and it over powers the disadvantages of it. The issues that come with this can be controlled and managed by the public more easily then letting go of all the opportunities that this major development has to offer to the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the question and state a clear view that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Relevant benefits include cultural learning, language acquisition, sharing information across fields, and trade; you also identify pressures on jobs, tourist sites, and local traditions. However, some points are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that immigration can harm both countries’ economies is unclear, and the link between international awareness and economic growth needs a more specific explanation or example. The conclusion repeats your position but does not weigh the strongest benefits against the most serious drawbacks. Develop fewer points more fully and connect each one directly to the effect of international travel and mass media to make the argument more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on advantages, one on disadvantages, and a concluding opinion. This makes the main direction easy to follow. You also use basic linking expressions such as “moreover,” “In addition to,” and “In my view.” At times, however, connections are mechanical or unclear. The opening sentence of the advantages paragraph combines several ideas without clear boundaries, while “which is losing the number and the nation which is gaining the number” is difficult to interpret. Some sentences also contain several points joined together, making the progression less smooth. Use clearer topic sentences, separate distinct claims, and make references such as “this development” or “these” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “exposure,” “opportunities,” “exchange information,” “overcrowded,” and “traditions.” These choices show an effort to discuss cultural and economic effects rather than relying only on very basic terms. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: examples include “excess” for “access,” “counties” for “countries,” and “eachohers.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “mass spread of the electronic devices” and “lossing the number.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. A more precise range—such as “international mobility,” “cultural exchange,” and “pressure on local infrastructure”—would help express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, more complex sentences, including “The issues that come with this can be controlled and managed…” This gives the response some structural variety. However, there are several errors in sentence construction, agreement, and punctuation. For example, “There are advantages and disadvantages of this new trends” has a mismatch between “this” and “trends,” and “it also open new windows” needs a correctly formed verb. The sentence beginning “The experience… shapes our views” runs two clauses together without suitable punctuation. Review subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and divide long sentences when they contain multiple claims. More accurate control of these patterns would make your argument easier to read.

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