Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

it is undeniable that in this contemporary era due to techology it becomes possible travel from one place to another place easily and quickly and also due to wide range of media spread over the world people able to know how other folks live in their countries.This trend has also been criticized due to some drawbacks .But ,this development has more prose over cose due to some factors .

On the one hand,This deveopment has some drawbacks duse to some following reasons .Firstly, it contribute huge amount of polloution over the world .Because ,Airplanes emissions harmful gaseous in the atmospher.

Secondly ,it also effects human Health .Due to determential gaseous in the air it also effect quality air and people feel difficulty in taking breathe .Thirdly ,excessive time access of medial to people contibute effects people's life for instance when people see standard of living of other people they also want to adopt same lifestyle but,due to sufficient amount they donot adopt this living standard they borrow huhe amount of money for this which after contibute high sress for them. Finally ,many people also use social media they watch culture traditions and fashion of other counties which they also try this which not allow in their country and relegion .

On the other hand , This development has enermous benefits due to following factors . first and foremost .this development make easier travel for people to travel from one place to another place very quickly .Due to this development they also meet with their beloved one's who live in abroad .furthermore , due to this positive deveopment they also able to know about other counties history culture and traditions and watch beautiful views of those countries .Last but not at least due to use of social media by watching differnent people liveing style we also enhance our living standard .

In conclusion , it can be see that this deveopment has been critized and have some drawbacks . But ,i beleove that this beneficial deveopment

has eneromous advantage over disadvantage .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question and state a clear overall view in the conclusion: the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Relevant points include pollution and health effects, pressure to imitate other lifestyles, and the benefits of visiting loved ones and learning about other cultures. However, the position is less clear in the introduction, and several ideas are asserted rather than explained. For example, the point about people borrowing money to copy a lifestyle needs a clearer link to international travel or media, while the claim that exposure to other cultures conflicts with local religion would benefit from a specific example. Develop fewer points with explanation and evidence, and make your position explicit from the beginning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for disadvantages and advantages, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “On the other hand” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the disadvantages paragraph moves from emissions to health, then lifestyle spending and cultural practices without clearly connecting these points. Some linking phrases are repetitive or awkward, and punctuation around them often interrupts the flow. Use clearer topic sentences, group related ideas, and add short explanations that show how each example supports the paragraph’s main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “pollution,” “emissions,” “standard of living,” “traditions,” and “advantages.” This gives you some means of discussing both environmental and cultural effects. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent enough to make parts of the response difficult to understand, as in “techology,” “determential,” “enermous,” and “prose over cose.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “excessive time access of medial” and “enhance our living standard.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Building a smaller set of reliable topic phrases will make your arguments clearer than attempting many uncertain expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including explanations with “because” and clauses beginning “when” and “which.” This shows an effort to vary sentence structure. However, errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation occur throughout and sometimes obscure meaning. For example, “people able to know” needs a finite verb, and “this development make easier travel” has problems with agreement and sentence structure. Several sentences also run together or use commas and full stops incorrectly. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check that each sentence has a subject and verb, and review agreement and punctuation before finishing.

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