Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is easy to know about different habitat of people living outside the country by doing international travel and wide spread of mass media.

I think the advantages has outweigh the disadvantages. It is easy and feasible to get access to various countries as travelling is widely popular nation wide.Due to high develop and advance technology , people can have adequate knowledge about different countries through media which help them to explore and shows interest to travel to differrent places.Additionally, it can lead to travel and visiting different countries. It can boost the economy of country and help in its development . Tourism can be increased and culture, tradition of the locality can be popularised among the world.

Some people might believe that ,it would be cautious to leak national information to other countries and lead to terrorism and attack. At the end security of the country can be problematic. However, the security can be impemented safety and he precautions can be done. Adequate security and checking at the aiport by the government help in maintaining harmony.

In contrast, media and tourism can boost the economy and reduces poverty of country. It would be beneficial that it could be use to improve quality of education, health facility and can have overall development. For instance, due to the media and tourism country like Nepal which ae underrated are becoming popular for its beauty, places and landcape.

In conclusion, overall mass media and tourism and influence the development of the country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a position that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks and give relevant points about tourism, economic growth, and cultural awareness. The Nepal example also helps connect the argument to a real place. However, the response addresses the question only partially because the advantages are asserted more than explained: for example, the link between tourism and improvements in education or health services is not developed. The disadvantage about security is mentioned, but the response quickly dismisses it without considering its significance. The conclusion restates a general benefit rather than clearly weighing both sides. The response is also one word below the required minimum. Develop each main point with a clear explanation or example, and make the comparison between advantages and disadvantages explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to benefits, a security concern, further benefits, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “However,” and “In contrast” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is not consistently clear: the paragraph beginning “In contrast” returns to advantages rather than presenting a contrast, and several ideas are crowded together in long sentences. Some connections are also difficult to follow, such as the shift from media access to travel and then to national development. Use one central idea per paragraph, order supporting points logically, and choose linking phrases that accurately show the relationship between ideas. Clearer referencing would also help readers follow what “it” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “mass media,” “tourism,” “security,” “economy,” and “development,” which makes the general subject clear. There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “national information” and “quality of education.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “different habitat of people,” “high develop and advance technology,” and “security can be implemented safety.” Spelling errors such as “differrent,” “impemented,” and “landcape” also reduce accuracy. These problems sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Build a bank of accurate topic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully; for example, use “ways of life,” “advanced technology,” and “security measures can be implemented.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a concession beginning “Some people might believe…” and a conditional-style explanation of how tourism could support development. However, the range is limited, and attempts to combine several clauses often produce frequent errors that can make the message difficult to follow. Examples include “the advantages has outweigh,” “technology, people can have,” and “which help them to explore and shows interest,” where agreement, verb forms, or sentence boundaries are not controlled. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “boost the economy of country.” Focus first on accurate subject–verb agreement, complete sentence boundaries, and consistent verb patterns. Shorter, correctly formed sentences will make your argument clearer before you add more complex structures.

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