Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The ease of international travels and the widespread of various kinds of mass media all around the world have made it easier than all around the people to know how other people live in there other countries. Definately, I think it has more advantages then disadvantages.

Firstly, internet make everything easy to find at any part of the world for all people. The opening of international flights for all countries make many advantages. We know about every country's traditional culture very well. Now, everyone can know every country and their is no misunderstanding of anything in their mind. For example, tourist form all part of the world travels in different countries to know about their religious and traditional culture, and make videos about different places that attractes the eye's, and people from all over the world sees and knows very well about each country.

Furthermore, i thinks it is a very perfect method for everyone to knows about every country's method of living and their thoughts for other, and it has more advantages then disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear view—“it has more advantages than disadvantages”—and give relevant points about learning cultures through the internet, flights and travel videos. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it does not explain disadvantages or compare them with the advantages, and most claims, such as “there is no misunderstanding,” are asserted rather than supported. The final paragraph repeats your position instead of developing another reason or example. The response contains 167 words, so it is 83 words below the 250-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt were not counted. To improve, discuss both sides, explain why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and support each main point with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your response has a basic paragraph structure, and “Firstly” and “Furthermore” signal the start of points. The overall progression is limited, though: the second body paragraph largely repeats the claim from the introduction rather than adding a distinct reason, and the conclusion is missing. Some links between ideas are unclear, particularly the move from international flights to cultural knowledge and then to videos. The long example sentence also combines several actions without clearly showing how they connect. To make the organisation more coherent, give each paragraph one clear purpose, use linking phrases to show cause and contrast, and finish with a brief conclusion that answers the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “traditional culture,” “international flights,” “religious,” and “mass media,” so the reader can identify your subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the message difficult to follow. Examples include “the widespread of” and “attractes the eye's”; “know” and “every country” are also repeated frequently. Spelling errors such as “Definately” and “form” further reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of precise expressions for cultural exchange and media, and check collocations and spelling. For instance, describe how travel “exposes visitors to” customs rather than saying they “know” a culture very well.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “For example” that links travel, learning and video-making. However, errors in basic structures are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. Examples include “internet make,” “everyone can know,” “their is,” and “people … sees,” where subject–verb agreement or verb forms are incorrect. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction, as in “at any part of the world” and “easier than all around the people.” The final paragraph’s “i thinks … to knows” shows similar control issues. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using subordinate clauses while checking agreement, articles and verb forms.

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