Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are two graps which illustrate the number of speed camera fines and the road accident fatalites in eight year period after the speed cameras were installed .

overall the number in speed camera fines increased slowly throught the years while the numbers of road accident fatalities rose then declined slightely and rose again through out the years.

In the first year of the speed camera installed in on the roads the number of fines were 200,000 which grew up gradually in the eight years period reaching to the number of 1,600,000 at the end . where the numbers in accident fatalites on the road were about 3,000 in the first year which rose to around 3,900 in the 2nd and 3rd year after that it declined to 3,000 again and it rised slowely to 3,500 in the 8th year.

there is also opinions by the peoples on the speed cameras on the roads. around 32% of the people claimed that the speed cameras reduced the numbers of accidents on the road while the 60% of them denied, it rest of the 8% answer we don't know in other survey 26% of people said that these speed cameras were installed to improve the road safty and 71% of them belived that it is to raise revenue rest of them didn't answer , in another survey 56% of people thought that there are too many speed cameras on roads in britain, about 19% of them said that they are so few other 17 % of people siad that they are about the right number , and the rest 8% of them didn't answer

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and all three survey questions, and your overview identifies the broad contrast: fines increased while fatalities fluctuated. The fines figures at the start and end are accurate, and the survey percentages are generally reported correctly. However, the account of fatalities contains important inaccuracies: you say the figure reached about 3,900 in years two and three, whereas it was around 3,300, and later describe it as rising to 3,500 rather than approximately 3,350. The overview also says fines increased “slowly,” although the rise became much steeper in the final years. To strengthen the report, select the most notable changes and compare them accurately, while keeping the survey findings concise and clearly grouped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on the charts and a final paragraph covering the survey. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. Some connections within sentences are less clear, however, especially in the long survey paragraph, where several findings are joined by commas and phrases such as “rest of them” and “in other survey.” These make it harder to see where one question’s results end and the next begins. Use separate sentences or clearer transitions for each survey question, and group related chart details together. More precise referencing would also help readers follow which figures or groups “they” and “them” refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “speed camera fines,” “road accident fatalities,” “declined,” “revenue” and “road safety,” so the meaning is generally understandable. There is some repetition of basic terms such as “number,” “people” and “said,” and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, including “graps,” “fatalites,” “grew up gradually” and “so few.” Spelling errors such as “slightely,” “slowely” and “safty” also reduce precision. Aim for a more controlled range of trend language and accurate collocations: for example, say that fines “rose steadily” or “increased sharply,” and that respondents “believed” cameras were intended to raise revenue. Proofreading spelling and word forms would make the report more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the main message is usually recoverable. However, some sentence structures are faulty, particularly where several clauses are joined without clear punctuation. For example, “while the 60% of them denied, it rest of the 8% answer we don't know” lacks a clear grammatical connection between the ideas. There are also errors in agreement and verb forms, as in “the number of fines were” and “it rised,” as well as missing or incorrect articles and prepositions in “in eight year period” and “in the first year of the speed camera installed.” Practise building accurate sentences around one main comparison at a time, and check subject–verb agreement, tense and sentence boundaries.

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