Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar graphs show the eight years period since the introduction of speed cameras and number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving very fast by speed cameras placed on roads and the number of people who killed in road accidents.

As seen in chart, two different sectors such as speed camera fines and road accident fatalities. To begin with speed camera fines in 1 year around 2lakh people break some rules and fined after that number is increase normally 2lakh to 6 lakh in different year 1 to 5 year after that the number is surge rapidly such as 6 to 8 years number of people 8lakh to 20 lakh. Moreover, road accident fatalities number of people is around 3000 to 3500 in 1st year to 8 years.

in addition, 32% people believe that speed camera reduce the number of accide

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the report is incomplete, as it cuts off mid-sentence while discussing the survey data. While you have identified the main trends in the bar charts, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the key features. The data points are presented in a list-like fashion rather than being synthesised into a coherent report. To improve, ensure you complete all sections of the task and provide a clear summary of the overall trends rather than just listing individual figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes awkward, such as 'To begin with speed camera fines' and 'Moreover, road accident fatalities'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the abrupt ending prevents a logical conclusion. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus. The lack of a concluding summary makes the overall structure feel incomplete.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are issues with word choice and units of measurement, such as using '2lakh' (which is not standard in IELTS Academic) and '1 year' instead of 'the first year'. Phrases like 'number is increase normally' and 'number is surge' demonstrate a lack of control over collocations and verb forms. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'witnessed a significant rise'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in 1 year', 'in different year'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence structures. For example, 'number of people who killed' should be 'number of people killed'. The sentence construction is often simplistic, and the lack of punctuation in some areas makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Aim to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, while ensuring they are grammatically accurate.

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