Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph illustrates data of fast drive accidents in addition to that also demonstrated the number of individuals been victim of over speeding in time frame of eight years after allocation of smart cameras. Along with reports on speed cameras by peoples.
Overall it is clear that there is constant rose in speed cameras each year.It was [redacted phone] in first year which incline to 1,600,000 in last year of survey.In contrast there is up and down in graph of road accident fatalities.
There was 3000 road accident in first year it has remain almost same in each year with some fluctuations .Whereas the graph of speed camera fines has significantly surge in each year.From 200,000 to 1,600,000 it has come a long way
Numerous people believe that speed cameras were not able to reduce accidents according to survey.Almost sixty percentage is not thinking that speed cameras is helping to decline the victims.Furthermore people believe the main purpose of installation was to raise revenue.The survey also states that there are excessive number of cameras on roads
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main trends in the graphs and the survey data, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identified the increase in fines and the stability of fatalities, the description lacks precision regarding the data points. For instance, you mention '3000 road accident' without specifying the unit or the time frame clearly. Additionally, the survey data is presented as a list of points rather than being integrated into a cohesive summary. To improve, ensure you provide specific data comparisons (e.g., comparing the start and end points of both trends) and avoid vague phrases like 'it has come a long way'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. For example, 'In contrast' and 'Whereas' are used, but the transition between the graph analysis and the survey results is abrupt. Some sentences are short and choppy, which disrupts the flow of the text. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects logically to the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'fast drive accidents' instead of 'speeding-related accidents' and 'allocation of smart cameras' instead of 'installation of speed cameras'. You also use 'rose' as a noun ('there is constant rose'), which is grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to data description, such as 'a steady increase' or 'a significant surge', and ensure you use the correct word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('speed cameras is helping'), incorrect verb tenses ('it has remain'), and missing articles ('in first year'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing spaces after periods. To improve, proofread your work specifically for basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentence structures are grammatically sound before attempting more complex forms.
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