Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The numbers of drivers in UK who have been caught driving too fast cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras is illustrated in graph.
overall, it can be seen that speed camera fines peoples more and more during eight-years and road accident fatalities rate is not stable during the time period.
In first year, speed camera fines [redacted phone] people to break the rules and over speed and during the time period it increases. In fifth year, [redacted phone] people fined by speed camera, while it was rosed by [redacted phone] in seventh and eighth year. I think 60% negative chance to reduce the number of accidents on the roads by speed cameras. Also, 26% chance to improve road safety when speed camera installation worked complete. the answer of third question is too few speed cameras on the roads.
In second graph, above 3000 people death in road accident in first year and it increases in second and third year. In fourth year, accidental death are decreases and with fluctuation trend around 3250 people death in road accident.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to cover both the graphs and the survey tables, but the analysis is inconsistent and lacks clarity. While the trends for speed camera fines are mentioned, the description of the accident fatalities is inaccurate and confusing. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal opinions ('I think') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires an objective summary of data. The interpretation of the survey results is also disjointed, failing to clearly link the data to the provided categories. To improve, focus on reporting the data objectively without personal commentary and ensure that all figures are accurately represented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow between sentences is often weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'in first year' and 'during the time period'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the survey results, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information, as the survey data is mixed with the graph data in a way that disrupts the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'peoples more and more' instead of 'increased' and 'rosed' instead of 'rose'. The student struggles with precise terminology for describing trends, relying on basic descriptors. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in collocation prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more precise trend-related terms would significantly improve the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('accidental death are decreases'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity expected at higher levels. While the reader can generally understand the intended meaning, the persistent errors in basic grammar and tense consistency are distracting. To improve, the student should focus on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones, and pay closer attention to verb forms and pluralization.
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