Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Introduction :

The graph shows speed cemera fines and road fatalities in britain over an eight year period since the speed cemra has been introduced and survey of people opnion on speed cemeras.

Overview:

Speed cemera fines introducing day by day while accident fatalities is sometime increased or other time decreased and then again increased.

Body paragraph 1:

In first year, speed cemeras fine 200,000 and in second year 300,000 , in third year 400,000 , in fourth year 500,000 , in fifth year 550,000 , and in sixth year 600,000 , in seventh year it was 1,200,000 lastly in eight year 1,600,000. This graph shows the constanstly increase of speed cemera fines every year.

Body paragraph 2:

60% people does not think that speed cemeras reduce the number of accident on the roads while 32% thinks that it reduce and other 8% dont know. 71% people think that the main reason for installation of speed cemera is to raise revenue whuile 26% thinks that to improve road safrty

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task but fails to provide a comprehensive overview. While you mention the increase in fines, you completely omit the data regarding road accident fatalities, which is a key part of the prompt. The report focuses heavily on listing the figures for fines year-by-year, which is a mechanical approach rather than an analytical one. To improve, you should group data to highlight trends and ensure all visual information is represented. The survey data is included, but the lack of synthesis between the trends in fines and the accident data limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and repetitive. You rely on simple listing (e.g., 'in first year', 'in second year') rather than using linking words to show relationships between the data points. The progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to connect your sentences and ideas more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'cemera' instead of 'camera', 'britain' (should be capitalized), and 'safrty'. The range of vocabulary is limited to simple descriptive terms. There is little attempt to use more sophisticated or academic language to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable'). To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description and ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., '60% people does not think') and missing articles (e.g., 'in first year'). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb forms and the appropriate use of articles, before moving on to more complex grammatical structures.

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