Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graphs below illustrate the proportion of drivers who are penalized with fines due to fast driving caught by cameras on roads along with number of persons killed in road accidents over a period of eight years .

Overall, number of drivers who are charged with fines showed a significant rise .While road accident deaths experienced a fluctuation in eight years .

In the first year the rate of drivers who caught by speed cameras were 2000,000. For subsequent two years numbers of did not rise much it was below 400,000 . In the fifth year there was sudden increase in the number of reckless drivers charged with fine reached to 600,000. Followed by 1,2000,000 in year seven .Numbers increased sharply to [redacted phone] in the last year ( 8th year)

However , Number of fatalities were higher in first year at the rate of 3000 which remained almost similar in following two years. In year five there proportion of deaths decreased sharply to 3000 . In the following years there was fluctuation in the road accident deaths numbers which remained below 3500.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main trends and provides data points for both graphs. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the student mentions '2000,000' for the first year, which is confusingly formatted, and states that fatalities 'decreased sharply to 3000' in year five, while the graph shows a different trend. Furthermore, the prompt included tables regarding survey results, which were completely ignored. To reach a higher band, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed and that data is transcribed accurately from the visual aids provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally misused, such as the abrupt transition 'While road accident deaths experienced a fluctuation in eight years' which is a sentence fragment. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical progression between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing. Improving the use of linking words like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' would help the flow of ideas significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'rate of drivers' instead of 'number of drivers' and 'reckless drivers charged with fine'. The spelling of numbers is inconsistent (e.g., '2000,000' and '1,2000,000'), which impacts the clarity of the report. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'a steady decline' or 'a significant surge', and ensure numerical data is presented in a standard, readable format.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the rate of drivers... were') and incorrect article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help improve your score in this criterion.

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