Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided chart illustrates the difference of the figure of drivers in Britain caught by overspeed driving and the figure of death people in road accidents before and after the introduction of speed cameras over an eight-year period. And a survey table reflects people's view on whether speed cameras have an positive impact on road accident.
Overall, it is noticeable that the number of road accident showed an stable trend, hovering around the 3000 to 3500 range, while the speed camera fines kept growing every year. And people hold negative opinion on speed cameras generally.
Turn to the speed camera fines and road accident fatalities, the number of speed camera fines stood at around [redacted phone] in the first year, then it followed a growing trend and topped at [redacted phone] in the eighth year. In contrast, road accident fatalities had been hovering around 3,200, without any big changes even with the increase in speed cameras.
As for people's opinion on speed cameras, approximately 60% did not think that speed cameras had effect on road accidents, while only 32% people agree with that these can improve the current situation. About 71% people though speed cameras was installed for the use of raising revenue. Over half people thought there are too many speed cameras had been installed on the roads.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
你的回答涵盖了任务的所有部分，包括图表数据和调查结果。然而，在数据报告方面存在明显的失实。例如，你提到罚款额在第八年 'topped at 160,000 in the eighth year,' 而图表清楚地显示该数字达到了 600,000。此外，你将事故趋势描述为 'stable'，但数据实际上显示出轻微的下降趋势。虽然你识别出了关键特征，但对数字数据的误读阻碍了你获得更高的分数。为了改进，请确保仔细核对你所写的数字与提供的视觉数据，以避免事实性错误。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
这篇文章在逻辑上分为四个段落：引言、概述以及分别涵盖图表和调查的两个主体段落。文中使用了 'Overall,' 'In contrast,' 和 'As for' 等衔接词来引导读者。然而，一些过渡显得略微生硬，指代有时也不够清晰，例如 'Turn to the speed camera fines,' 这一短语，这并非标准的学术表达。分段使用得当，将不同的数据集分离开来，这有助于报告的整体流畅性。
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
你的词汇范围足以完成任务，但缺乏精确性。你使用了诸如 'overspeed driving' (should be 'speeding') 和 'death people' (should be 'fatalities' or 'road deaths') 之类的短语。你尝试使用了一些主题相关词汇，如 'fatalities' 和 'revenue,' 但用词往往不够自然或不够准确。为了达到更高的分数，请专注于使用更精确的搭配并避免重复用词。例如，与其使用 'growing trend,' 不如考虑使用 'upward trajectory' 或 'significant increase.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
你的回答中混合了简单句和复杂句。虽然意思总体清晰，但存在一些语法错误，例如 'the number of road accident showed an stable trend' (should be 'accidents' and 'a stable trend') 以及 'over half people thought there are too many speed cameras had been installed' (incorrect verb tense and structure)。这些错误出现频繁，但并未妨碍交流。为了改进，请更加注意主谓一致，以及冠词和被动语态结构的正确使用。
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