Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In the britain the peoples drive their cars very fast so thats why they face many accidents and also pay fine due to their mistakes and non seriousness the drivers were caught by speed limit cameras .And now i explain eight years road fines and road accidents fatalities .So in first year [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] speed cameras fines were recorded and about 2400 deaths were recorded .In next year about [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] fines were recorded and about 2400 deaths were estimated. In the third year [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] fines were recorded and about 2000 deaths estimated and deaths were reduced as previous year. In the fourth year [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] fines were recorded and deaths were reduced as previous year. In the fifth year fines were increased as usual about [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] fatalities about 2200. In sixth year fines also increased but death rate remains same. so conclusion is that in every year the fatalities rate remains almost same but speed cameras fines were increased.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the task requirements adequately. While it mentions the graphs, it ignores the survey tables entirely, which is a significant omission. The description of the data is repetitive and lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends. The data points provided are often imprecise (e.g., '300000 to 400000'), and the analysis does not highlight key features or comparisons effectively. To improve, you must include all parts of the prompt, provide a clear summary of the overall trend, and use specific data points accurately rather than ranges.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and paragraphing. It is written as a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices; the sentences are linked in a repetitive and mechanical way using 'and' or 'so'. The progression of ideas is unclear, as the report jumps between years without a structured approach. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group related data logically, using a variety of linking words like 'however', 'furthermore', or 'in contrast'.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. Words like 'recorded', 'fines', 'deaths', and 'increased' are used repeatedly throughout the text. There is no attempt to use a wider range of vocabulary or synonyms to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'declined', 'remained stable'). Additionally, there are errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'non seriousness' and 'fatalities about 2200'. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description and trends, and try to vary your word choices to avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with capitalization ('britain'), article usage ('the peoples', 'the britain'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, making the text difficult to read. There is a lack of complex sentence structures; the writing relies almost exclusively on simple, repetitive clauses. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, correct use of articles, and subject-verb agreement. You should also practice combining simple sentences into more complex ones using subordinating conjunctions.

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