Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given graphs below shows that the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of individuals killed in roads accidents, over an eight year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables shows the results of a survey on citizens opinions on speed cameras.
In overview, speed camera fines and road accident fatalities are shown here in the given diagram. Speed camera fines and road accident fatalities are shown here in the given diagram.
To begin with, So the speed camera fines rapidly spikes about [redacted phone]. So in the year 1, it is about [redacted phone], in the year 2, it is about below [redacted phone], in the year 3, it is about [redacted phone], in the year 4, it is above [redacted phone], in the year 5, it is about [redacted phone].
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; it only describes the first graph and fails to mention the road accident fatalities or the survey results entirely. The overview is repetitive and lacks a clear summary of the main trends. Because the response is underdeveloped and fails to address the majority of the data provided in the prompt, it falls into the lower band range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks logical progression. The introduction is repetitive, and the body paragraph is essentially a list of figures rather than an analytical report. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the paragraphing is ineffective. The repetition of the sentence 'Speed camera fines and road accident fatalities are shown here in the given diagram' indicates a lack of control over the structure of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic phrasing such as 'the given graphs below shows' and 'it is about'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for describing trends or data (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable'). The lack of variety and the simplistic nature of the language used restrict the score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('graphs... shows', 'tables shows') and awkward sentence construction ('So the speed camera fines rapidly spikes'). The sentence structures are basic and repetitive, lacking the variety of complex structures required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the overall control of grammar is weak, which occasionally hinders the clarity of the information presented.
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