Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this graph the number of drivers in britian driving to fast in the road the speed camera in the road and number of people kill by over speed cars . The graph show the last 8 year percentage .In the 1 year of the graph [redacted phone] cameras fines in the road .And year 2 speed cameras fines [redacted phone] in this year . The 3 year of the graph there are [redacted phone] fines in this year. And the next 4 and 5 years the fines ratio willn be [redacted phone] to be the [redacted phone] . Next year 6 the ratio of the speed camera is 80000 and 7 and 8 the fines ratio will be the high [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] . And the next road accident fatalities in the 8 year . The accident fatalities high to the 3000 in the 8 year . In the graph do you think speed camera reduce the number of accident on the roads Yes percentage is 32 NO percentage is 60 and Dont know percentage is 8 . In the next the installation of speed cameras to raise revenue 71 percentage . And speed cameras on the road to many in the percentage of the graph
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the data but fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. The information is presented as a list of figures rather than a cohesive report. Several data points are inaccurate or misread (e.g., the mention of 80,000 for year 6, which does not align with the provided visual). The response lacks a summary of the relationship between the variables, and the final section regarding the survey results is disjointed and fails to synthesize the information effectively. The report does not meet the requirements for academic tone or analytical depth.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization. There is no paragraphing, and the flow of information is erratic, jumping between the line graph data and the survey tables without clear transitions. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, making the text feel like a series of disconnected sentences. The referencing is unclear, and the lack of structure makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data analysis. The response does not demonstrate a logical arrangement of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'number', 'graph', and 'year', and struggles with accurate terminology for data description (e.g., 'fines ratio' instead of 'number of fines'). There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'kill by over speed cars' and 'to many in the percentage'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision, and the errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many fragments and run-on sentences. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there are significant issues with prepositions and articles (e.g., 'in the 1 year of the graph'). Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic capitalization and missing commas. While some simple sentences are understandable, the lack of complex structures and the high frequency of errors significantly hinder the clarity of the report.
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