Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given report throws light on rash driving and numbers of people who became victims of this rash driving in about 8 years . People have different views regarding these cameras .let's discuss them in following paragraphs. As we see numbers of accidents have increased with passage of time.Round about 3000 or than this people have become victim of rash driving in different years . Betterment of speed cameras over years have made it possible to catch these culprits responsible for people's death in recent few years. There are different points of views about installation of speed cameras.The main reason is safety measures.Round about 60 percent of accidents have been controlled due to the fear of being caught and heavy fine In conclusion,the situation has become better due to installation of these cameras.In reality the number of speed cameras has increased and situation has became much better.People try to abide by laws in fear of being caught and punished .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately report the data provided in the graphs and tables. While it mentions the general topic, it lacks specific data points, trends, or comparisons. For instance, it refers to 'about 3000' fatalities without specifying the time frame or the actual trend shown in the graph. Furthermore, the response ignores the survey table entirely, failing to report the public opinion data. The analysis is overly generalized and does not provide a clear overview of the information, which is a requirement for Academic Task 1. To improve, you must describe the key features and trends using the actual figures provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inappropriate, such as the informal 'let's discuss them in following paragraphs.' Referencing is often unclear, and the connection between the graphs and the survey results is missing. The flow between sentences is mechanical, and the lack of clear transitions makes the report difficult to follow. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus that relates back to the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'rash driving' and 'betterment of speed cameras' are used repeatedly, and the word choice is often imprecise or informal. There is a lack of academic vocabulary suitable for a report. For example, 'culprits' is not the most appropriate term for drivers in this context, and 'round about' is too informal for an academic task. To improve, you should incorporate more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'a significant proportion.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with article usage (e.g., 'in different years'), subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'situation has became'), and sentence structure. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for minor errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms.
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