Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graphs show that the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught too fast driving and the number of people killed in road accident over eight years. Driving too fast is so risky its causes of road accident. In road accident many people was killed by the car who cross its speed limits. Many people thinks that speed cameras fine are more neceassry because its reduce the road accidents . In the Britain speed camera fines are increasing and the road accident are on upper level . The number of Britain drivers is increasing who have been caught driving to fast . The people opinions on speed cameras reduce the road accidents is 62 percent and the 32 percent thinks is not valid . On the other hand people opinions on the mean reason for the inexibation of speed cameras is to raise recents . I thinks that the number of speed cameras is about right.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the data. You mention that 'speed camera fines are increasing' and 'road accidents are on upper level', which contradicts the typical trend in such data sets. Furthermore, you include personal opinions ('I thinks that the number of speed cameras is about right'), which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. The data from the tables is presented in a fragmented way without comparing the figures effectively. To improve, focus on identifying key trends and significant data points rather than providing subjective commentary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization. It is written as a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of information. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; sentences are often disjointed. For example, the transition between the graph data and the survey results is abrupt. To improve, use clear paragraphing—one for the introduction/overview, one for the graphs, and one for the survey tables. Use linking words like 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your sentences and ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors that impede clarity. Phrases like 'inexibation' (likely meant 'introduction') and 'raise recents' (likely meant 'revenue') are unclear. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'on upper level' instead of 'increasing' or 'rising'. There are also spelling errors like 'neceassry'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'significant', and 'proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the intended meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('Many people thinks'), tense usage ('people was killed'), and sentence structure ('the number of drivers... who have been caught too fast driving'). The writing relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles and prepositions correctly.
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