Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided line graph illustrate the gradual increase in the speed camera fines from year 1 to 8 further more,road accident fatalities to gradual increase and then remain constant from year 1 to 8.
overall,it can be seeemed as, there is a gradual increase the speed camer fines from year 1 to 6 .Moreover there comes a sharp increase from year 6 to 8 with fine upto [redacted phone].On the contrary, a slight increase comes in the road accident fatalities from year 1 to 3 with 33000 and then it can be seen as it remains constant from the year 4 to 8.
From the table it can be seen that ,the most of people (about 60%) agrees that the cameras could not decrease the number of accident on road.32% people thinks that cameras reduce the number of road accidents. On the other hand,about 8% people never thought about this.
In addition, most of people thinks that main reason for installation of speed cameras is to raise revenue.26% people thinks that it is to improve the road safety while,3% people do not know about this.On the contrary,more than 50% people thinks that there are too much cameras on the road.On the other hand,some people argues that number of cameras are very low rate installed on roads.Almost 17% people says it is right additionally 8% people do not know about these cameras.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task, including the line graphs and the survey tables. You have identified key features, such as the sharp increase in fines from year 6 to 8 and the public perception regarding revenue generation. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is essential for Task 1. Additionally, some data points are slightly inaccurate or lack precision, such as the description of accident fatalities. To improve, ensure you provide a clear 'overview' paragraph that highlights the most significant trends across the data sets without listing specific figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate (e.g., 'further more,road accident', 'overall,it can be seeemed as'). The transition between the graph analysis and the table analysis is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that punctuation around these devices is correct. Improving the logical flow between sentences would help the report feel more cohesive and professional.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'gradual increase', 'sharp increase', and 'revenue'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'most of people' instead of 'most people', and 'there are too much cameras' instead of 'too many cameras'. Some phrases are repetitive, and the phrasing 'it can be seeemed as' is non-standard. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure subject-verb agreement when using quantifiers like 'most' or 'many'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in the road accident fatalities'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'most of people thinks'), and punctuation errors (e.g., spacing after commas). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that you proofread for missing articles and consistent punctuation usage.
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