Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph depicts, the number of Britain drivers caught overspeading by speed cameras. Besides this, it shows the number of people killed in road accidents.

Looking from an overall prespective, it is clearly seen that, speed camera fines had increased significantly over the eight-years period. whereas, Road accident fatalities had almost remains the same.

To begin with, In first year, Speed camera fines was 20,000, After that in the next five year it g gentaly incresed and reached about 600,000. Then in the Sixth year, the number noticibaly grow. After that, in the remaining 2 years, the number significantly grow and reached around 1,600,000.

Moving towards, Road accident fatalities was around 3,000 in the 1 year. Then the number had some fluctuations but almost remains the same in the next two years. It slightly fell, in the 4 year, and had minor changes till 6 year, Then it had little growth in the next 2 years.

The graph depicts, the number of Britain drivers caught overspeading by speed cameras. Besides this, it shows the number of people killed in road accidents.

Looking from an overall prespective, it is clearly seen that speed camera fines had increased significantly over the eight-years period. whereas, Road accident fatalities had almost remains the same.

To begin with, In first year, Speed camera fines was 20,000, After that in the next five year it g gentaly incresed and reached about 60,000. Then in the Sixth year, the number noticibaly grow. After that, in the remaining 2 years, the number significantly grow and reached around 1,600,000.

Moving towards, Road accident fatalities was around 3,000 in the 1 year. Then the number had some fluctuations but almost remains the same in the next two years. It fell, in the 4 year, and had mirror changes till 6 year, Then it had little growth in the next 2 yea

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address all parts of the task. While you describe the trends for speed camera fines and road accident fatalities, you completely ignored the survey data provided in the tables. In IELTS Academic Task 1, you must synthesize all provided information. Furthermore, the response is repetitive, as you essentially wrote the same report twice. The data points are also inconsistent; for example, you mention 600,000 in one paragraph and 60,000 in another for the same year. To improve, ensure you include all visual elements and proofread to ensure data accuracy.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure because the entire text is repeated. This repetition creates a confusing reading experience. While you use some basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Moving towards', the overall organization is severely compromised by the redundant content. Paragraphing is present, but because the second half of the essay is a near-verbatim copy of the first, it does not contribute to a clear progression of ideas. You need to focus on presenting unique information in each paragraph and avoiding unnecessary repetition.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'increased', 'grow', and 'fell'. There are also frequent spelling errors such as 'overspeading', 'prespective', 'gentaly', 'incresed', 'noticibaly', and 'mirror' (likely meant 'minor'). These errors occasionally make it difficult to follow the intended meaning. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'surged', 'plummeted', or 'remained stable', and ensure you check your spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Speed camera fines was', 'Road accident fatalities had almost remains') and article usage (e.g., 'in 1 year', 'in 4 year'). The sentence structures are simple and often lack correct punctuation, such as unnecessary commas after 'depicts' and 'seen that'. While you attempt some complex sentences, the high frequency of basic errors in tense and agreement hinders clarity. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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