Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graphs illustrate the numbers of drivers, who have been caught on cameras for driving too fast on roads, and the number of individuals died in road accidents, over an 8 year period from the installation of cameras. The tables depict the percentages of opinions on speed cameras by the citizens of Britain.

Overall, the percentages of fines for overspeed increased by the end of the period, while the no road accidents fluctuates throughout the period with no significant change.

To begin with, the numbers of fines for overspeed represented upward trend with 200,000 in the 1st year and 600,000 by the end of 5th year. After the 5th year the numbers of fines surged drastically, around doubled of 6th year's fines at 1,600,000.

Turning to, road accidents, the graph showed the same numbers of accidents by the end of period with some fluctuations. In the beginning, more than 3,000 accidents reported which drooped at almost 3,000 in the 4th year and again increased at the same level by the end of period. Most individuals accounted at 60% of Britain thinks there is no any reduction in accidents because of speed cameras and 32% in contrast, while only 8% people don't know. The people who feels the cameras were installed to improve road safety accounted for 26%, while most of the people stood up at 71% feel to raise revenue

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task, including the line graphs and the survey tables. You have successfully identified the key trends, such as the rise in fines and the relative stability of accident numbers. However, the analysis of the survey data is slightly confusing; for instance, the phrase '32% in contrast' lacks a clear referent, and the interpretation of the survey results could be more precise. While you have provided a clear overview, some of the data points, such as the specific figures for the 6th year, are described in a way that is difficult to follow. To improve, ensure that your comparisons between the data sets are more explicit and clearly linked to the provided figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'Turning to'. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, 'Turning to, road accidents' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the reading flow. Additionally, some sentences lack clear logical progression, making it difficult to follow the relationship between the data points. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, which affects the overall cohesion. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help create a smoother, more professional structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the trends, such as 'surged drastically', 'upward trend', and 'fluctuations'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'individuals died' instead of 'fatalities', 'no road accidents fluctuates' (which is contradictory), and 'most of the people stood up at 71%'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your collocations are natural and accurate in the context of describing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'the numbers of fines for overspeed represented upward trend' (missing articles), 'most individuals accounted at 60%' (incorrect preposition/verb usage), and 'the people who feels' (subject-verb agreement error). While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and the accurate construction of passive voice structures when describing data.

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