Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The rendered bar graph illustrates the information about the results of a survey conducted for the britsh car drivers who have been recorded driving at high speed by speed cameras, and the count of individuals killed in road accidents, in between the eight-year period after the introduction of speed cameras and the report of people's opinion about these cameras. The data is calibrated into numbers and percentile.

After taking the statistical data into account, it may be inferred that from first year the ratio of fines for over-speeding remained between 200,000 to 600,000 which is then dramatically increased to 1,600,000 in the eight year. Interestingly, the number of road accident fatalities remained fluctuating between 3,100 to 3,500 in given eight years.

Turning toward the test of the details, it can be clearly seen that majority of people declined that speed cameras resulted in reducing number of accidents on roads while, only 32% people agreed. Moreover, 71% individuals opinion about the main reason for installation of speed cameras was to raise revenue. Lastly, 56% individuals voted that there were more than enough speed cameras on roads

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task, including the graphs and the survey tables. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the graph trends lacks precision; stating that fatalities 'remained fluctuating' is vague, and the report fails to highlight the key contrast between the rising number of fines and the relatively stable number of fatalities. While the survey data is included, the interpretation of the percentages could be more analytical. To reach a higher band, ensure that you not only report the data but also synthesise the information to draw clear comparisons and identify significant trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a clear progression from the introduction to the graph analysis and finally the survey results. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the transition 'Turning toward the test of the details' is slightly awkward and unnatural. Additionally, some sentences could be better linked to improve the flow of ideas. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'these cameras') is always precise will enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and sophistication required for a higher band. There are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'rendered bar graph' (which is not standard) and 'britsh car drivers' (spelling error). Phrases like 'test of the details' are not idiomatic in this context. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'upward trend', 'remained stable', or 'a significant proportion', and ensure careful proofreading to avoid basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'the ratio of fines... is then dramatically increased' (incorrect tense/passive voice usage) and '71% individuals opinion' (missing possessive 's'). There are also minor punctuation and article errors throughout the text. To achieve a higher score, you should aim for more error-free sentences and demonstrate better control over complex grammatical structures, such as relative clauses or more advanced passive constructions, while ensuring subject-verb agreement.

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