Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graphs depict the information pertaining to the number of car drivers who drive cars at a very high speed by cameras and the road accidents take place, however the tables illustrate the ramifications of people's perspectives.
overall, in the first year, [redacted phone] people paid fine and this count inclined gradually till five years. A sudden surge has observed from sixth to eighth year, which witnessed around 16,00,000, whereas the road accident fatalities has shown fluctuations at about 3,000.
looking at other details, it is clear that just over one-third of people have agreed that cameras would reduce the accidents, while 60% disagreed. nearly, three quarters of people believe rise in revenue is the predominant cause for installing the cameras. A tiny proportion of individuals do not have any idea about it. Concerning about the number of speed cameras, more than a half of people agree to install more, however too few are described by 17% of the citizens.
overall, speed camera fines show an upward trend, while oscillations are observed in road accident category.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The report covers all parts of the task, including the line graphs and the survey tables. However, the presentation of data is somewhat imprecise. For instance, the statement '16,00,000' is an inaccurate reading of the graph, and the description of the accident fatalities as 'fluctuations at about 3,000' lacks detail regarding the specific trend. While you have identified the main features, the lack of precision in reporting figures and the failure to clearly contrast the data points prevent this from reaching a higher band. To improve, ensure that data is transcribed accurately and that key trends are highlighted with specific supporting figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Concerning about the number of speed cameras'. The transition between the line graphs and the tables is abrupt. While there is a logical progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive use of 'overall' at the beginning of paragraphs limit the flow. Improving the variety of transition signals and ensuring smoother connections between sentences would enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'ramifications', 'predominant', and 'oscillations'. However, there are instances of word choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'drive cars at a very high speed by cameras' and 'too few are described by 17%'. These errors do not impede communication but show a lack of precision. To reach a higher band, focus on using collocations more naturally and ensuring that vocabulary is used in the correct context to convey information clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'A sudden surge has observed' (passive voice error), 'Concerning about' (incorrect preposition usage), and 'more than a half of people' (article usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences starting with lowercase letters. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors indicates that you have not yet achieved consistent control over complex structures. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct prepositional phrases will help improve your accuracy.
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