Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This line graph shows the results of survey of number of drivers caught overspeeding and road accidents occured in Britain over an eight-year period.
On the left hand side we have a graph showing the traffic fines fined to the people who over-speeded. For first five years, the the camera fines were increasing gradually. In those years the fines raised from two hundred thousand to nearly five and a half hundred thousand. but it started increasing dramatically from the sixth year. the traffic fines peaked in the years seven and eight to twenty hundred thousand.
On the right hand side the graph shows the number of deaths in traffic accidents. in the year wo, three, five, seven, eight the number of deaths were peaked but the most deaths recorded in a single year was in year two, three and eight.
The survey of the people taken in respect of traffic rules suggested that 60% of the people said the speed cameras does not effect the number of accidents. 71% said the main reason for installation of the speed cameras is to raise revenue and 56% said the number of speed cameras on the roads are too much.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task, including the graphs and the survey data. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the trends in the line graphs lacks precision, particularly in the second graph where the description of 'peaked' years is confusing and inaccurate compared to the data provided. The survey data is presented as a list of percentages without any attempt to synthesize or compare the findings. To reach a higher band, you should focus on identifying key trends and significant features rather than simply listing data points, and ensure that your descriptions of the data are accurate and easy to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The report is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and limited. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, and there is a lack of variety in how you link ideas. For example, the start of the second and third paragraphs relies on repetitive phrasing ('On the left hand side', 'On the right hand side'). Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider range of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You use basic terms like 'increasing' and 'peaked' repeatedly. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'traffic fines fined to the people' and 'the number of speed cameras on the roads are too much'. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for', and ensure you are using words in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('speed cameras does not effect', 'number of speed cameras... are too much'), incorrect use of articles, and awkward phrasing ('survey of number of drivers'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and spacing. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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