Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graphs illustrate the number of drivers who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads in Britain and the people who killed in road accidents over an eight years.
Overall, camera fines due to speed increased in the given period, while the road accident fatalities relatively stable over the period. In the survey 1 most opinion was about no while in second the main reason of installation of speed camera was to raise revenue.
Regarding, the speed camera fines was about [redacted phone] in the first year of given period, it reached [redacted phone] after significant increased in 8 year. The people who killed in road accident was about 3000, it reached to 3300 in second year. It fluctuated across the period, and went to its starting figure in the 8 year.
With regard to survey, the individuals opinion was 32% who agreed on camera reduce the number of accident and 60% who not agreed, while 8% who don't know. The reason of installation camera was 26% to improve safety and 71% to raise revenue. The individual who don't know was about 3%. The number of speed camera was 56% individual agreed on too many and only 8% who don't know, while who agreed on too few was 19% and about right was only 17%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The writer addresses the task by describing the graphs, but there are gaps in the explanation of trends and details. Phrases like "the people who killed in road accidents" are unclear and should be phrased correctly as "the number of people killed in road accidents." Also, some numbers are inaccurately represented, affecting clarity. The overall structure lacks clear comparisons of data, which is crucial for achieving a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
There is some coherence in the response, but it suffers from awkward sentence constructions, such as "the main reason of installation of speed camera was to raise revenue." Transitions between ideas are sometimes unclear or abrupt. Phrasing should be improved for better flow, like "Overall, camera fines due to speed increased" could be smoother as, "Overall, fines for speeding increased over the years."
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used in the response includes some correct terms, but many expressions are imprecise or poorly structured. Phrases like "the individuals opinion" should be "individuals' opinions", and terms like "too many" or "too few" are overly simplistic. The use of relative frequencies (like 'about 200000') should be clarified for precision, as it affects the overall understanding of the data presented.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical range varies, but there are many grammatical errors that detract from the clarity of the writing. For example, phrases like "the people who killed" should be restructured to "the number of people who were killed." Additionally, there is inconsistency in subject-verb agreement and sentence fragmentation, such as unhedged statements that could be more academically precise. A review of grammar rules regarding plural forms is needed.
Overall feedback
The response provides a basic overview of the trends illustrated in the graphs, but several improvements are necessary for a higher band score. Focus on clarity by ensuring accuracy in the representation of data, particularly with numerical information. Improve vocabulary range by using more sophisticated and precise terms. Additionally, refine grammatical structures to produce grammatically correct and complete sentences. Practicing these areas will enhance overall coherence and clarity.
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