Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Here the graph shows the road accidents and speed camera fines over eight years of periods in Britain. It seems that the number haven't reduced in this period.

So, about the speed camera fines the first year had 200,000 people who had broke the rule.

In the second year, around 300,000 people had fines. On the third year, 400,000 people were include and it kept increasing over about 500,000 peoples in the 4th year whereas, 5th year has 600,000 peoples and afterwards the number of people were increased massively. On the 6th year there were about 800,000 people and on 7th and 8th year there where about 1,200,000 and 1,600,000 peoples which had speed camera fines.

Talking about the road accidents, around 3000 to 3500 people died on every year over this 8 years period. On 1st and 2nd it was about 3200 and 3400. On 3rd and 4th year, it was about 3400 and 3000. On 5th and 6th year there were about 3300 and 3200. And in the last on 7th and8th year there were about 3300 and 3500.

According to the people and their opinions majority of say that speed cameras don't reduce the number of accidents. On the other side 71% people think that speed cameras were installed to raise revenue and also 56% of people thinks that there are too many speed cameras in the road

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by describing the trends in fines and fatalities, and summarizing the survey data. However, the analysis is largely a list of figures rather than a synthesis of the data. The overview is weak; stating 'the number haven't reduced' is an oversimplification, as it ignores the specific trends shown. To improve, you should group data points to highlight key trends (e.g., the steady rise in fines versus the relative stability in fatalities) rather than listing every year individually. The survey data is included, but the connection between the graphs and the survey results could be more clearly articulated to provide a more cohesive report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'On the... year'. The transition between the data description and the survey results is abrupt. To improve, use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas, such as 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Regarding the survey findings.' Additionally, ensure that referencing is clear; for example, 'the number' in the introduction is vague and should specify which number you are referring to.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There is frequent repetition of words like 'people' and 'number'. Some phrasing is unnatural, such as 'over eight years of periods' and 'on the road' instead of 'on roads'. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'had broke the rule' (should be 'had broken'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'witnessed a significant increase,' and avoid repetitive sentence structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('the number haven't reduced', '56% of people thinks'), incorrect preposition usage, and tense inconsistencies. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with missing commas and spacing errors like '7th and8th'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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