Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph given some information about speed camera fines and road accident fatalities. We discuss both

Overall, at the first in speed camera fines genrally the amount is up every year and last year number is highest and their number is 1,600,000 around and lowest is 2,00,000 approximately. And second is road accident fatalities usually their statistics are movement normally.

in detail, A first graph show year and their numbers. At the first three year the statistics are move normal than middle three year were same situation one to six year a movement was 2,00,000 to 8,00,000 , but last two year was unbeliveble progress the figure is 8,00,00 to direct 16,00,000.

At the second , graph is road accident fatalities. their tallest figure are around 3,300 in 2,3,8 year and shortest is in 4 year at 3000 , in this other year like 1,5,6,7 in under 3,300 to 3,000

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the data. The description of the trends is confusing and lacks precision. For example, stating that the statistics 'move normal' or 'are same situation' does not convey the actual data trends. Furthermore, the response ignores the survey tables entirely, which is a significant omission. To improve, you must identify the key features of both the graphs and the tables, provide a clear summary of the main trends, and use specific data points to support your descriptions rather than vague generalizations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as 'At the first three year' and 'At the second , graph is'. The lack of clear transitions between sentences makes the report difficult to follow. To improve, focus on using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'in contrast', 'consequently') to connect ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that follows a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'unbeliveble progress' and 'tallest figure' are not appropriate for an academic report. There are also issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'genrally' and '1,600,000 around'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly. To improve, you should learn specific vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'dramatic increase', 'peak', and 'remain stable', and practice using these in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'The graph given some information', 'last two year was unbeliveble progress'). The sentence structures are simple and often fragmented. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and pluralization. You should also practice identifying and correcting common errors in your writing, such as missing 'the' or 'a' and incorrect verb forms.

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