Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. As compared from the year 1 to year 8 there is a rapid increase in the speed camera fines.In the 1st year 2,00,000 camera fines have And where as the road accident falalities are at constant from the 1st year to 8th year in between 3000 to 3500 accidents have been occured for every year .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is severely underdeveloped. You have only described a small portion of the data and completely ignored the survey tables provided in the prompt. To achieve a higher band, you must provide a comprehensive overview of all data sets, including the survey results, and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for sufficient development of your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is very short, making it difficult to assess paragraphing or the use of cohesive devices. There is a lack of logical progression between the few sentences provided. The use of 'And where as' is grammatically incorrect and does not function well as a cohesive link. To improve, you should structure your report with a clear introduction, an overview of the main trends, and separate paragraphs for the different data sets, using a variety of linking words to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'rapid increase' and 'constant' are appropriate, but the range is too limited to demonstrate flexibility. There are also errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'falalities' (fatalities) and 'occured' (occurred). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant upward trend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'As compared from the year 1 to year 8' is awkward phrasing, and '2,00,000 camera fines have' is an incomplete sentence. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. You should focus on using a mix of simple and complex sentences while ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct punctuation.
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