Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line graphs illustrate the figures of drivers who have been caught for driving at a rapid speed on roads of Britain, and the number of inhabitants killed in accidents over an-eight year period. While the accompanying tables demonstrate feedbacks of Britain's population on introduced surveilliance system.

Overall, it is evident that, while the number of drivers rose dramatically, the figures for accident fluctuated between certain numbers. According to the report, A substantial proportion of individuals reckon that cameras did not diminish the fatalities of accident.

To begin with pie chart, in the first year a mere 2,00,000 drivers were caught under CCTV cameras, albeit the number of fast drivers grew significantly, peaking at 16,00,000 towards the end of the given period. Regarding the figures of accident, it began at just over 3000 increased to 3300 in the third year and gradually declined to 3000 in the fourth-year; and rose slightly finishing at 3000 by the 8th year.

Table presented a significant survey on people's opinion. 60% of the total Britain populace believe that the ratio of accident has not declined by equipping cameras. By contrast just over half of that content it has reduced. Furthermore, 26% of them think CCTV system has been enabled to improve road safety. Whereas, 71% of the total citizens think government wanted to raise revenue. Finally, 56% of people considered there are more than required cameras. And 19% and 17% think too few and the number of cameras were right, respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the key features of the graphs and tables. You provided a clear overview and selected relevant data points to support your description. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, you mention a 'pie chart' when the prompt refers to graphs and tables, and your description of the accident figures is slightly confusing. To improve, ensure you accurately label the visual aids and double-check your data transcription. The report covers all parts of the prompt well, but the analysis of the survey data could be more concise to avoid listing every single percentage, which can make the report feel like a list rather than a synthesis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'By contrast', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel forced. The referencing is generally clear, but the connection between the survey data and the main argument could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices more naturally to improve the overall flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'diminish', 'substantial proportion', and 'populace'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'inhabitants killed in accidents' (should be 'fatalities') and 'enabled to improve' (which is imprecise). There are also minor errors in word form, such as 'feedbacks' (which is uncountable) and 'surveilliance' (spelling). To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure you are using collocations correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'the figures of accident' (should be 'accident figures'), 'the number of cameras were right' (subject-verb agreement error), and inconsistent punctuation. Some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'Table presented a significant survey', which lacks an article. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to enhance your accuracy.

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