Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph depicts the number of drivers for careless and overspending in various countries.The graph also depicts the people died in accidents and the reasons for installation of road safety cameras.lets analyse this in following paragraphs. First of all we see that in start the cameras were few and with passage of time their numbers has increased.With passage of time their quantity has been increased.This is all for safety of people. The installation of cameras has helped to decrease the numbers of accidents on road.Drivers are challaned for over speed and violation of laws. Now government is trying to install more cameras on the roads. This is a good step to create a law and order situation in country .Some people think that installation of cameras is for safety purpose while majority is of opinion that it is an effort to raise revenue.while few don't know the real purpose.Government should arrange awareness among people regarding this.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the task requirements effectively. You have not described the data provided in the graphs and tables; instead, you have provided a vague, generalized commentary. The prompt asks for a report on specific trends regarding speed camera fines and road accident fatalities, but you have not mentioned any figures, trends, or specific comparisons from the visual data. The response lacks an overview of the main features and fails to report on the survey results mentioned in the tables. To improve, you must focus on reporting the data accurately, including specific numbers and time periods, rather than offering personal opinions or general statements about road safety.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The organization of the response is weak. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is not logical. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and repetitive (e.g., 'With passage of time'). The introduction is informal and does not clearly set up the report. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') to connect your ideas more smoothly. The current structure lacks the necessary flow required for an academic report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to describe the data precisely. You use basic terms like 'quantity' and 'numbers' repeatedly. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'drivers are challaned' (a non-standard term) and 'overspending' (which refers to money, not speed). To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'a significant increase', or 'a downward trend'. Expanding your range of academic vocabulary will help you describe the trends more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'their numbers has increased'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple, and there is little evidence of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods in several places. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or passive voice, which are essential for academic writing. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and capitalization is also necessary.
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