Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this graph we have a numbers oof drivers that are drive the cars ,and aslo we have a instruction of the speed cameras.the road accident and the speed camera fines are also dsicuss in this graph.

Firstly we discuss about the speed camera fines ,at the 1 year the fine is 200,000 and at the 2 year the fine is half increase to the 1 year and goes to the level of the 300,000 and furtherly at the 3 year we have a fine of the 400,000.at the 4 year we have a fine of 500,000 and at the 5 year we have a fine of 600,000 and now come to the 6 year we have a fine of the 800,000 .At the second last fine which is the 7 year we have a fine of 1,200,000 ans at teh last year which is the 8 year we have a fine of the 1,600,000.

At the second paragraph we are discussing about the road accident fatalities.at the 1 year we have a fatalities about the 3000 and in the 2,3,4,5 year we have a fatalities like around 3200,3300,3000,3050.we have also a number of fatalities like 3000,3200,3300 at the year of the 6,7,8 .

In conclusion we will discuss about the thinking level of spped cameras reduce the number of accidents on road,and also discuss what is the main reason of installing the speed cameras that improve the road safety around 26% ,and other possibilities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. While it attempts to describe the data, it lacks a clear overview of the trends, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 report. The information provided is largely a repetitive list of figures rather than a synthesis of the data. Furthermore, the response completely ignores the survey tables mentioned in the prompt, focusing only on the graphs. To improve, you must identify key trends (e.g., the inverse relationship or lack thereof between fines and fatalities) and ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive, such as the constant use of 'at the X year'. The referencing is often unclear, and the transition between the description of the graphs and the conclusion is abrupt. The conclusion itself does not summarize the main features but instead introduces new, vague ideas about 'thinking levels' and 'possibilities' that were not clearly established in the body paragraphs. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic words like 'fine', 'number', and 'year'. There is little attempt to use academic vocabulary or synonyms to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable'). Additionally, there are numerous spelling errors such as 'oof', 'aslo', 'dsicuss', 'furtherly', and 'spped', which hinder readability. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description and proofreading your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is significantly flawed, with frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and article usage. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'we have a numbers oof drivers that are drive the cars'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the reliance on simple, repetitive patterns makes the writing feel disjointed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for grammatical accuracy before attempting more complex structures.

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