Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph represent the numbers of drivers in britain who are involved in overspeeding caught by speed cameras placed on roads and numbers of individuals were killed in road accidents over an eight year period since the introduction of speed cameras. the table reflect the people opinions on speed cameras.
Overall, it is crystal clear that the numbers of drivers caught speeding surged substantially over the eight year period whereas road accident fatalitiesv experienced a modest and fluctuating decline. public sentiments toward the camerasis predominantly negative with most people believing their primary purpose is revenue generation rather than safety.
At a fleeting glance, the graph the numbers of speed camerasfines grew dramatically from 200,000 in a year to 1.8million by year 8 despite brief plateau between year 5 and year 7. while the road facilities started at 3,500 in year and dropped slightly to 3,000 in year2 over,the next over the next year slightly droped.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main trends in the graph and mentions the table, but it is incomplete. You have failed to describe the data in the tables regarding people's opinions on speed cameras, which is a key part of the prompt. While you provided an overview, the description of the graph data is also cut off abruptly at the end of the third paragraph, leaving the report unfinished. To improve, ensure you allocate enough time to cover all visual data provided and complete your analysis. The lack of detail regarding the survey results significantly impacts the task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices such as 'whereas' and 'while' are used, but there are issues with mechanical errors and punctuation, such as the lack of capitalisation at the start of sentences and missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'year2 over,the next'). These errors make the text feel disjointed and occasionally difficult to follow. Improving your proofreading to ensure consistent paragraphing and logical flow will help raise your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a reasonable range of vocabulary, such as 'surged substantially', 'modest and fluctuating decline', and 'revenue generation'. However, there are several spelling errors and typos, such as 'britain', 'overspeeding', 'fatalitiesv', and 'camerasis'. These errors are frequent enough to distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and more precise collocations. While you attempt some sophisticated vocabulary, the overall control is inconsistent due to the high frequency of minor errors and formatting issues.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement ('The given line graph represent') and missing articles ('in year', 'at a fleeting glance'). Punctuation is also problematic, with several run-on sentences and missing spaces. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of grammatical slips prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic sentence structure, capitalization, and article usage to improve your accuracy.
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