Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The rendered graph depicts the information about the the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads , and the number of people killed in road accidents , over an eight year period since the introduction of speed cameras . the tables show the results of survey on pupils opinions on speed cameras .

Overall the the highest figure of rising in speed camera fines have numerous role in daily life challenge it is grow up up to the 1600,000 and the lowest figure in road accidents fatalities which have 3,000 only as compare to speed camera fines .

In speed camera fines have the very higher chances of cases no think speed cameras incline the number of road accidents because its is help in all over the years in the time period. it is 32 % yes or 60% never.

Further more in road accident fatalities are decline with the speed camera fines the main reason for the insta

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately describe the provided data. While it mentions the graphs and tables, it does not present the key features or trends in a logical or accurate manner. The data points mentioned, such as '1600,000', are inaccurate based on the provided visual information, and the analysis is fragmented and confusing. The response does not provide a clear overview or a meaningful comparison between the trends in speed camera fines and road accident fatalities. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence, which prevents a full coverage of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are disjointed and difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel like a series of disconnected statements rather than a coherent report. The referencing is unclear, and the progression of information is absent. The abrupt ending further disrupts the flow of the response, making it difficult for the reader to identify a clear purpose or conclusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often misused. Phrases like 'daily life challenge' and 'it is grow up up to' are unnatural and impede clarity. There is significant repetition of basic terms, and the student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data (e.g., 'the highest figure of rising'). The spelling errors, such as 'pupils' instead of 'people's', and the misuse of 'incline' instead of 'decline' or 'influence', demonstrate a lack of control over the required academic register.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the intended meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the tables show the results of survey'), incorrect sentence structure, and misuse of prepositions. The use of complex structures is attempted but consistently fails, leading to ungrammatical phrases like 'in speed camera fines have the very higher chances of cases'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read.

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