Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graphs and tables illustrate that the number of drivers who have been caught driving too fast and the people killed in road accidents after the introduction of speed cameras in Britain, over an 8-year period with the results of a survey on people's opinion on speed cameras.

Overall, the graph shows that both the speed camera fines and the road accident fatalities had an incline but road accident fatalities had some fluctuation over the period. Furthermore in the survey majority of people think speed cameras did not reduce the number of accidents, to improve revenue speed cameras were installed and the roads have too many cameras.

A detailed analysis of the line graph shows that, in the first six-year fines from speed camera had a significant increase from [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] then it rose sharply to [redacted phone] till final year. On the other hand road accident fatalities had a marginal increase from 3100 to 3300 between first and third year then it dropped back to its initial levels in fourth year and it had a slight increase to 3400 till last year. In spite of fluctuation in middle years.

Furthermore, the 62% of people do not think that speed cameras reduce the number of accidents with 32% are with the statement and 8% have no idea. Similarly 71% of people think speed cameras are installed to increase revenue with 26% thinking it's for road safety and rest for they do not know the purpose; whereas 36% of people think there are too many cameras followed by people thinking there are too few at 19% with 17% thinking it's about right and rest do not have any say in the statement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the key features of the graphs and tables. You provided a clear overview and supported your main points with data from the charts. However, the report could be improved by ensuring the data is presented more accurately. For instance, you mention a 'significant increase' in fines, but the data shows a steady climb rather than a sudden spike. Additionally, the description of the survey results is a bit repetitive in structure. To reach a higher band, ensure that the relationship between the data points is clearly explained and that the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs for the graphs and survey data. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'In spite of', which help the flow. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, the sentence 'In spite of fluctuation in middle years' is a fragment and lacks a clear connection to the previous sentence. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that every sentence is grammatically complete would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. You use terms like 'marginal increase', 'fluctuation', and 'fatality' appropriately. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'fines from speed camera had a significant increase' (should be 'fines from speed cameras saw a significant increase') and 'rest for they do not know the purpose'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and ensure that your phrasing sounds more natural. The current range is adequate for the task but lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Issues include missing articles ('the 62% of people'), incorrect verb forms ('majority of people think... were installed'), and punctuation errors. For example, 'in the first six-year fines from speed camera had a significant increase' is grammatically awkward. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve your accuracy.

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