Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This line graph shows the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught by driving too fast by speed camera placed on roads and also display the number of people killed in road accidents over an eight-year. The speed camera fines highest number 1,6000,000 over the eight-year period as compare to the road accident, there is stabilisation between 3000 to 3500 time period.
While, The 60% of the population think that speed cameras did not reduce the number of road accident but 71% of the people says to raise the revenue of installation while the 26% of ratio believes to improve the road safety first.
On other hand, 56% of people also consider that there is too many cameras on the road and 19% people think that there is less camera on the road.
Overall this graph shows the people opinions on speed cameras and to improve the safety of road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the provided data, but it fails to accurately report the key features. For instance, the figure '1,6000,000' is incorrectly formatted and lacks clarity. The description of the trends is vague, and the comparison between the graph and the survey tables is poorly integrated. The response lacks a clear overview of the main trends, which is essential for Task 1. Furthermore, the data interpretation is inconsistent, and some figures are presented in a way that makes them difficult to follow. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant trends and reporting them with precision, ensuring that all parts of the prompt are addressed clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow between sentences and ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the abrupt transition 'While, The 60%...' and 'On other hand'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information. The structure lacks a cohesive overview, and the connection between the graph data and the survey results is disjointed. To achieve a higher score, you should use a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic that flows logically into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'stabilisation between 3000 to 3500 time period' and 'raise the revenue of installation'. The use of 'ratio' to describe percentages is inaccurate. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the reliance on basic vocabulary hinder the quality of the report. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for', and ensure that you use words in their correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage ('the 60% of the population'), subject-verb agreement ('71% of the people says'), and sentence structure ('This line graph shows... and also display...'). The attempt at complex sentences is limited, and the punctuation is often incorrect, particularly with commas. The number formatting '1,6000,000' is also a significant error. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for these common errors is essential.
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