Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Given graph highlights the number of people killed in road and crossing speed limit by Britain drivers as thay were caught by speed cameras over the period of eight years.graph also demonstrate people,s perception about speed cameras after survey.

Speed camera fines are trending in the graph over the period of eight years as compare to the road accidents.

200,000 speed camera fines recorder in year 1, below 400,000 record in second year and almost 400,000 fine were record in third year .

Where as in these three years road accidents were between 31000 to 33000 respectively.

In year 4 ,5 and 6 speed camera fines were recorded as 500,000 ,600,000 in both years correspondingly .

In year 4,5 and 6 the numbers of road accidents were as 3000,31000 and 31000.

Speed camera fines of year 7 and 8 rise as 1200,000 to 1600,000.whereas road accidents were remained on the figures between 31000 to 32000 in last two years.

32% people's agreed that speed cameras reduce the number of accidents on the road while 60% says No and 8% says that they don't know this.

26% people says that improve road safety is the main reason of installation of speed cameras,71% says to raise revenue and 3% says they don't know.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by describing the trends in speed camera fines and road accidents, as well as the survey results. However, the reporting of data is inconsistent and contains inaccuracies. For example, the student states that road accidents were 3000 in year 4, which is a significant misreading of the graph (which shows approximately 30,000). Furthermore, the overview is weak; it merely states that fines are 'trending' without highlighting the key contrast between the rising number of fines and the relatively stable number of fatalities. The data presentation is somewhat mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesizing the information effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by the repetitive structure of the sentences. Each sentence starts with a time reference or a data point, making the flow feel list-like rather than analytical. Cohesive devices are minimal and often misused, such as 'Where as' used at the start of a sentence to contrast data. The paragraphing is present, but the transition between the graph data and the survey data is abrupt. The use of referencing is also weak, with some sentences lacking clear subjects or logical connections to the previous points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic verbs like 'recorded' and 'says'. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'crossing speed limit by Britain drivers' instead of 'speeding violations by British drivers'. The phrase 'people,s perception' contains a punctuation error. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'fines' and 'fatalities', the overall range is insufficient to convey complex ideas with precision. The spelling of 'thay' for 'they' and the inconsistent use of commas also detract from the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response uses a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., '60% says No', '71% says to raise revenue') and article usage. Punctuation is often incorrect, particularly with the placement of commas and the use of apostrophes in 'people,s'. The sentence structure is often fragmented or awkward, such as 'Speed camera fines of year 7 and 8 rise as 1200,000 to 1600,000'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's ability to follow the data points clearly.

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