Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This paragraph show the numberof drivers in britian who have been caught driving to fast by speed camera placed on the road.This table also show the results of a survey on people opinions on speed cameras.
First of all ,this graph show the speed camera fines and road accident fatalities . speed camera reduce the ratio of accident on road the total ratio of spped camera fines in year 1 to 8 increases . speed camera instalation reduce the road accident .
Secondly i think that spped camera reduce the number of accident on road to about 35 percent per annual . the main reason of speed camera instalation is to improve safety measure and to reduce accident on road .
At last, million of people killed in road accident since eight year and million of people pay speed limit challan since eight year. many of the people give honest reviews about the spped camera. almost 32 percent of people think that speed camera reduce the number of accident on road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately describe the data provided. While it mentions the graphs and tables, it does not provide a clear overview or report specific trends from the data. Instead of summarizing the figures (e.g., the increase in fines or the decline in fatalities), the response makes vague, unsupported claims such as 'million of people killed'. It lacks a clear analytical approach, failing to highlight key features or compare the data points effectively. The response reads more like a personal opinion piece than an academic report, which is a significant weakness for Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'At last' to introduce a concluding point, which is inappropriate for this context. Referencing is unclear, and the link between the data and the commentary is weak. The paragraphing does not follow a logical structure that would allow the reader to follow the information easily. The overall flow is hampered by the lack of clear transitions between the description of the graphs and the interpretation of the survey results.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'britian', 'spped', 'instalation', and 'challan'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data accurately; for instance, the student uses 'ratio' incorrectly when referring to the number of fines or accidents. The language is not academic in tone, and the lack of precision in word choice makes it difficult to convey the information clearly. The student relies on basic, often inaccurate, terminology throughout the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This paragraph show', 'speed camera reduce'), article usage, and pluralization. Sentence structures are simple and often repetitive. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing around commas and periods. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the errors are pervasive enough to cause difficulty for the reader. The lack of control over basic grammatical rules significantly lowers the score for this criterion.
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