Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart elucidate information about the graph and show the number of drivers in britian who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Now talk about speed camera fines in 1 year the fine [redacted phone] and the 2 year the fine betweer 2 lakh to 4 lakh and the 3 year the fine will be 400,000 and the 4 year the fine between 500,000 to 600,000 but in the 5 year the fine will be 600,000 and in the 6 year the the fine will be 800,000 and in the 7 year the fine will be 1200,000 and the last 8 year the fine will be 1600,000.

now i would like to talk about road fatalities.

in 8 year the road fatalities between 3000 to 3500.

Now i would like to talk about people think and their opinions about speed cameras reduce the

number of accidents on the roads?

And now this is the results of people opinions.

Yes

32%

No

60%

Don't know

8%

Now i would like to talk about people think is the main reason for

the installation of speed cameras?

To improve road safety

This is the result

26%

To raise revenue

71%

Don't know

3%

And now i would like to talk about people think about the number of

speed cameras on the roads?

This is the result

Too many

56%

Too few

19%

About right

17%

Don't know

8%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address all parts of the visual prompts, including the bar chart and the three survey tables. However, the data presentation lacks academic objectivity and clear structuring. The student lists points using informal conversational filler such as 'Now talk about speed camera fines' and 'Now i would like to talk about road fatalities'. Furthermore, some data points are inaccurate or poorly expressed, such as 'the fine betweer 2 lakh to 4 lakh'. There is no clear overall overview provided for the visual data, which prevents the response from reaching higher bands. It meets the basic requirements of addressing the prompt visually, but the execution remains underdeveloped and disorganized, aligning with a band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the report is heavily compromised by improper paragraphing and a lack of logical progression. The writer breaks the text into disjointed single-sentence blocks and uses conversational transitional phrases like 'now i would like to talk about' instead of standard cohesive devices suitable for an academic report. There is no clear overall progression; the data jumps back and forth between the charts and the survey tables without cohesive signposts. Paragraphing is nonexistent in any academic sense, as each line or tiny fragment stands alone. These structural weaknesses point firmly to a band 4.0 descriptor level.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily reliant on simple terms copied directly from the prompt such as 'speed cameras', 'drivers', and 'road accidents'. The writer introduces inappropriate vocabulary or currency terms like 'lakh' which are out of context for a British-focused academic task. Words are frequently misspelled or misused, such as 'elucidate information about the graph' where 'illustrate' or 'present' would be expected. There is a very limited range of vocabulary with noticeable errors that occasionally impede understanding, which fits the band 4 criteria.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly constructed simple sentences. There are frequent, basic errors in tense usage, capitalization, and punctuation, such as 'britian', 'in 1 year the fine 200000', and missing subjects or verbs across multiple lines. Complex structures are virtually absent, and the heavy reliance on listing data with incomplete grammatical frames ('And now this is the results of people opinions.') leads to frequent errors that cause strain for the reader, placing the grammar firmly at a band 4.

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