Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates the proportion of drivers in Britain who have been arrested due to fast driving by speed cameras fixed on roads, and a lot of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the incorporation of speed cameras. The table describes the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Overall, the graph shows that in the 8 year of period, the maximum amount of speed camera fine was in last year and minimum was in first year whereas the ratio of accidents fatalities were maximum in second and third year. The minimum amount of fine was 200,000 and then it fluctuate from low to high at 1,600,000 in last year which was maximum. Similarly the accidents possibilities was also fall from fourth to six years and then significantly rose in 7th and 8th year.

On the other hand, from the perspective of individuals, the reduction in accidents due to installation of speed cameras is 32%. But 60% individuals didn't agree with this approach. Furthermore, 71% people think that speed cameras installation is just to raise revenue and 26% believe that it is for the improvement of road safety. 3% reviewed they don't know. 56% people's perspective is that there are many number of speed cameras and too few think that hese are 19%, as well as 17% are right about the numbers but 8% are those who don't know about the number of safety cameras.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by addressing both the graph regarding speed camera fines and fatalities, and the table presenting survey opinions. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that the minimum amount of fine was '200,000' and mentions 'the accidents possibilities was also fall from fourth to six years', which mixes up details and contains awkward phrasing. The overview is somewhat overly simplistic and lacks a fully clear synthesis of the main trends. While all parts are addressed, the lack of precision in describing specific data points and minor misinterpretations of the visual information place this in the Band 6 range.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The text has a coherent overall arrangement, divided into an introduction, an overview paragraph, and a body paragraph addressing the table. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical. Words like 'Furthermore', 'Similarly', and 'On the other hand' are used, but logical progression between sentences is occasionally hindered by abrupt shifts in ideas. For example, moving from the graph trends directly to individual opinions lacks a smooth transitional sentence. Paragraphing is attempted, but the third paragraph clumps together too many distinct survey findings without adequate structural separation, leading to a crowded presentation of ideas. These issues align with a Band 6 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'incorporation', 'proportion', and 'revenue', but also makes noticeable word choice errors, such as 'arrested due to fast driving' (drivers are fined or caught, not arrested by speed cameras), 'accidents possibilities', and '56% people's perspective is that there are many number'. There are also awkward phrasings like '3% reviewed they don't know'. These inaccuracies and limited control over collocation restrict the score to Band 5.5, though communication is generally maintained.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some variety. However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward structures throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement errors ('the accidents possibilities was also fall'), incorrect prepositions ('in last year' instead of 'in the last year'), and awkward relative clauses ('there are those who don't know about the number of safety cameras'). Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent ('the 8 year of period'). These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band.

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