Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrates that speed camera fines and road accident fatalities.
Speed of the camera fine however road accident fatalities, the number of drivers in britain caught driving too fast by theri speed, Hence cameras placed on roads to know people killed in road accidents, over an eight-years of period, they introduced speed of cameras on road who are driving speed.
The speed camera fines are growth in countries 2 lakhs to 1 crore 60 thouand people has speed camera fines, However road accident fatalities are drop due to camera fines, there are speed cameras reduced the number of accidents on the road around 32% some cities 60% not and don't know 8%.
The main reason for the installation of speed cameras to enhance road safety 26%, To raise revenue 71%, Don't know 3%, Wheather the number of speed cameras on the road 56%, Too few 19%, about right now 17% enhance ultimately don't know 8%.
By the introduced speed camera it reduce the road accident fatalities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt, including the line graphs and the survey tables. However, the interpretation of the data is severely flawed and inaccurate. For instance, the student states that 'road accident fatalities are drop due to camera fines,' whereas the graph clearly shows fatalities remaining relatively stable between 3,100 and 3,350 over the eight-year period. Furthermore, the survey data is misinterpreted and combined confusingly with percentages that do not accurately reflect the source material. Ideas are poorly developed and the overview is incomplete and confusing, placing the response below Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the text is extremely weak. Although paragraph breaks are attempted, there is no logical progression or coherent flow between sentences. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused entirely (e.g., 'Speed of the camera fine however road accident fatalities...'). Referencing is highly confusing, and sentences frequently fragment into disjointed clauses that make it very difficult for the reader to follow any line of reasoning. Paragraphing does not serve a functional structure for an Academic Task 1 report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely limited, repetitive, and often inappropriate for an academic report. Words are misused or cobbled together in unnatural ways (e.g., 'growth in countries 2 lakhs to 1 crore 60 thouand people has speed camera fines'). There are severe errors in word choice, form, and collocation throughout the text. The range is inadequate to convey the data clearly, resulting in communication being frequently strained and impeded.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is very weak. The response contains almost no error-free sentences. There is a pervasive lack of basic sentence structure, with many sentences consisting of fragmented clauses strung together without proper subordination or coordination (e.g., 'Hence cameras placed on roads to know people killed in road accidents, over an eight-years of period, they introduced speed of cameras on road who are driving speed.'). Tense usage, punctuation, and prepositions are frequently erroneous, severely impeding readability.
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